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Alan
post Aug 20 09, 02:27
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LIGHT’S OUT

It was a wrench,
at eight bells,
to part from the wench
when she went to the powder room

to powder her nose -
what a delicious idea -
was not, I suppose
easy, in the deepest of gloom

The light bulb - and life’s -
quite transient nature
which causes much strife
is not shielded from death’s dreaded doom

Fate’s caught you off guard
altogether that night
clearly marked is your card :
“there is, sadly, no in at the womb ...”

Alan McAlpine Douglas

Challenge words : wrench eight powder nose
delicious transient bulb shield card together



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ace
post Aug 22 09, 17:51
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Real Name: Ross Baird
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Alan:


I should have replied to this one sooner to comment upon the uniquen rhyme scheme
(something like A-B-A-C; D-E-D-C; F-G-F-C; H-I-H-C ?) and to say how I enjoyed the final line
(unfortunately with which I am too familiar).


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