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 Assyrian  Posts: 271 Joined: 21-July 07 From: somewhere twixt 'n' tween Member No.: 456 Real Name: Sam Richmond Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:N/A  |
Many thanks to all who suffered through and helped so much
'rum Visions inTwilight~Revisited In anticipation I search the twilight as the horizon dims and you come to me in purples once the sun has slipped its golden sabers into that sheath which nighttime holds I await you … your step is soft it stirs the lilac and sends me a fragrance my senses awaken, quiver your vision tempts I need the beauty the sanctity of your bosom bared wanton breath vaults breasts clefted shadows licking at your neck turned to catch last light curved inviting reaching out to my lips moments pass into violet eyes are blurred but not the touch virile on velvet, mauveine emotion, sighs fallen from mulberry lips … colors fade into memories purple ever the last to go your parting sculpture remains in my eyes I reach out your promise abides you are there for me in twilight Original poem ... Visions inTwilight I look for you in the twilight for you come to me in purples once the sun has slip’t its golden sabres into that sheath which nighttime holds I await and you come your step is soft it crushes on the lilac and sends me a fragrance my senses awaken quiver your vision tempts I need the beauty the sanctity of your bosom bared shadowed cleft licks greedily at your neck turned to catch last light curved inviting reaching out to my lips colors fade into mem’ries purple ever the last to go the molded sculpture remains in my eyes I reach out you are there for me always there for me in twilight Corrected spelling of bosom. Thank you Eisa. Also corrected nighttime, thanks Siren ·······  ······· Values are to integrity as spirit to spirituality ... the one is needed that the other is sustained ~ Sam
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4rum Visions in Twilight Mar 30 10, 07:54 
Oludpoet This your poem about vision is rich in imagery
and... Mar 31 10, 07:33 4rum Dear Oludpoet;
I am deeply encouraged by your k... Mar 31 10, 08:37 Siren Hello Sam,
I believe this the first poem I've ... Mar 31 10, 10:06 4rum Oh Dani, what a wonderful treat! I can hardly ... Mar 31 10, 10:45 Siren Hello Sam,
I am glad I could be of help and even ... Mar 31 10, 16:33 4rum Dear Dani;
I'm doing a revision but it may ... Apr 2 10, 14:15 Siren Hey Sam,
I am patient and my return to your threa... Apr 2 10, 16:28 Eisa Hi Sam
I have enjoyed reading your poem and its ... Apr 3 10, 16:15 4rum First, I'm very grateful for the help and sugg... Apr 3 10, 18:28 Eisa Hi Sam
There is no reason why you shouldn't c... Apr 3 10, 18:39 4rum Please understand that none of this is intended to... Apr 3 10, 19:13 
Eisa QUOTE (4rum @ Apr 4 10, 01:13 ) Please un... Apr 4 10, 05:44 Sekhmet Oh Sam! What a beautifully seductive verse... Apr 4 10, 01:48 4rum QUOTE (Sekhmet @ Apr 4 10, 01:48 ) Oh Sam... Apr 5 10, 16:09 4rum ... mmm'k ... better? or worse? Too busy towar... Apr 4 10, 06:47 Siren Wow Sam!!!
Wonderful rewrite and with... Apr 4 10, 18:34 Eisa Wow!!!! Sam this is tremendous... Apr 5 10, 15:02 4rum Dear Dani;
I really can't express my gratit... Apr 5 10, 15:42 4rum Dear Eisa;
As is the case with Dani, I'm ju... Apr 5 10, 15:49 Eisa QUOTE (4rum @ Apr 5 10, 21:49 ) Dear Eisa... Apr 15 10, 18:36 4rum Hi Eisa I'll run it off on word and try it. ... Apr 16 10, 14:31 4rum Ok, I'm back. It is just a little more wordy. ... Apr 16 10, 14:40 4rum ... hmmmm ... all formatted and everything ... I t... Apr 16 10, 14:45 Eisa Hi Sam - yes, I agree ... adding 'the' it ... Apr 16 10, 15:15 4rum chuckle ... yep ... already did that in the 'f... Apr 16 10, 15:28 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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