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 Assyrian  Posts: 256 Joined: 2-November 15 From: Croydon, Surrey Member No.: 5,284 Real Name: Antony Glaser Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Eira Rhaposdy  |
A meeting of minds
Revision My heart is on fire. I tirelessly burn after realising my feelings equates to falling under your spell. ORIGINAL My heart is on fire. I tirelessly burn after the realisation my feelings equates makes me fall under your spell. ·······  ·······Imagination fires the soul, resolution the longing.
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greenwich A meeting of minds (revised) Dec 18 15, 16:26 
K.S. Lenk I love 'one-liners' like this, but punctua... Dec 19 15, 11:05 greenwich Thank you Krista Dec 19 15, 12:11 Eisa I like the revision Antony - it flows much better.... Dec 21 15, 15:30 
AMETHYST Hello Greenwich,
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