Hibiscus Magic Options

[Orion]

My toes didn't care
if last night's leftover rains
drenched them on this early morning

walk to the middle
of that glorious hibiscus
whispering, wooingly, to the
camera-woman,

"Put your coffee cup down - now;
pick up your camera!"

The backyard trip was
well worth soaked sandals
and feet - and ankles -
traipsing in blades,
wispy, wet, swaying.

What was this calling about?
Moved me from my cozy kitchen
to see delicate beauty
through mesmerized lens-

{click}

little bee in bee heaven,
bee toes pollen-dipped in
piles of snow-white

{click}

If a bee could have
smiled, I know this
bee was grinning for
a quick shot.

Left a wondering me -
who was happier
the saturated photographer
or the pollinated bee?

[Orion]

Hello Merlin,

I do respect your opinions regarding the type poetry one likes -- re: the form, structure, and an overall feel for poetry's set-up on the page. I relook at examples that you've mentioned within this poem particularly: line breaks & pauses. In my workings with Free Verse creations, I am comfortable with a more relaxed set-up on the page. Often there will be unexpected breaks within the work, and that's my comfort zone. I say, "to each his/her own" when selecting favorites for styling the words. And I know you agree that we vary in our styles. Respectfully shared: some people prefer Coke; some prefer Pepsi; some drink water every time.

I appreciate that you've stopped in to read and leave a comment here.
Thanks for your time & ideas shared.

Regards,
Jan