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[Styrmwolf]

Full moon rises, a silver fay world reborn
And thou, flame pelted dryad of hill and fern
Stalk through emerald shades as a specter forlorn.
Thou, slight ash marked death bearer, others cannot discern

Blood on snow kissed chin, yet not in razored mind
Hunger slacked with Diana's hard earned blessing.
Ignorants name thee vermin, for they know not your kind
Silva's feral heart shatters as they ride, lusting.

Lusting after thee's burning fur
With blood rage not known to thou's breed.
Yet it is for nie, thou bright eyes match their violent cur
They not of the wood, soon turn back to a benevolent mead

And thou restless specter, are blessed
Go where thee might
For only the moon light's sacred
Know the secrets of the night

[jgdittier]

Full moon rises, a silver fay world reborn
And thou, flame pelted dryad of hill and fern
Stalk through emerald shades as a specter forlorn.
Thou, slight ash marked death bearer, others cannot discern

Blood on snow kissed chin, yet not in razored mind
Hunger slacked with Diana's hard earned blessing.
Ignorants name thee vermin, for they know not your kind
Silva's feral heart shatters as they ride, lusting.

Lusting after thee's burning fur
With blood rage not known to thou's breed.
Yet it is for nie, thou bright eyes match their violent cur
They not of the wood, soon turn back to a benevolent mead

And thou restless specter, are blessed
Go where thee might
For only the moon light's sacred
Know the secrets of the night

Dear Whit,
I note you define yourself as a beginner and so will hope to share some thoughts with you that
won't deter you from becoming a true talent in the future.
I smile at myself as I am continuously reminded, often by my own writings, that I am a stubborn mule and
write using the ploys of the masters, many of which are now considered poor structure.
Over these 6 years I've learned to temper my enthusiasm for that style, simply because it's mighty hard to swim against the current. I now only use those ploys when I think I must and I have to bite my tongue when critiques remind me my practices are outdated.
Your usage of the olde pronouns remind me of some of my earliest postings. I also use inversions, elisions, cap lines, cliches, all of which is poetic license nowadays. However, I write light verse, maintain that I
need these ploys to attain my goal of making the reader smile. You need early in the game to decide to whom and therefor how you'll appeal to your readers. If you write conventional pure poetry, I advise you to
listen to your readers as much as your muse permits.
I made a vow years ago that my quest is to promote the respect for the bards of yore and their works.
I hope you stay the course as you grow as a poet and I'll be pleased to help you along the way and to
look especially for your postings.
Cheers, ron jgdittier
my e-mail address is

rbjones02@optonline.net