Snowflake ~ Revised 12/12/06, Atarlis Fileata Options

[Guest_Cathy_*]

Snowflake ~ Revision 1

Tat lace
of frosty flake
in five-point grace;
a crystal-flocked snowy wake
of wintry white embrace
in frosty-flaked
tatted lace.

Cathy Bollhoefer
copyright Dec 2006


Snowflake ~ Original

Tat lace
of frosty flake
in five-point grace;
a crystal-flocked snowy wake
that winter winds embrace
in frosty-flaked
tatted lace.

Cathy Bollhoefer
copyright Dec 2006


Atarlis Fileata [At’-ar-lee’ Fee-lee-ah’-tay] (Gaelic for "repeating poetic") is a 7-line poem with 2, 3, 4, 5, 4, 3, 2 words per line, and only one rhyme — in the 1st, 3rd, 5th and 7th lines: ABacaBA, the first two lines reversing as the last two lines. (There may be a very slight variation in line 6 and 7, usually only changing one word or rearranging the words already used, but saying basically the same thing.)

There may be any # of stanzas, but each stanza must be able to stand alone.

[JustDaniel]

This is a beautiful piece, Cat. It's good to see you writing in your own creation again, and this is a fitting one to continue your collection, methinks.

I'm assuming that you're using 'tat' as a verb, therefore making this a 'telling to do' sort of image? I'm not sure why you have 'flake' in the singular, since it seems more natural in the plural. It concerned with the shape, then I'd probably want to say "with" in place of "in" along with the plural, perhaps like this ?

Snowflake

Tat lace
of frosty flakes
with five-point grace;
a crystal-flocked snowy wake
that winter winds embrace
into frosty-flaked
tatted lace.

flickin' sLightly, Daniel