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 Babylonian  Posts: 114 Joined: 17-April 05 From: New Mexico Member No.: 110 Writer of: Poetry  |
REVISED AFTER LIZ'S KIND AND IMPROVING REMARKS
A trip to Roswell clinic site to train a course with nurses’ byte who'll teach us to prevent such risk, we mask and cleanse, turn stay-safe disc. Why did his kidneys fall asleep? His road to health is long and steep. He walks, round track, as works that’s brisk. We mask and cleanse, turn stay-safe disc. A higher power holds our hands. He gives us strength. He understands the pain we feel without life’s frisk. We mask and cleanse, turn stay-safe disc. His renal glands are shutting down but nurse removes his doubt and frown, new chance for life, a healthy bisque. We mask and cleanse, turn stay-safe disc. © 2006 Carol Dee Meeks FRENCH KYRIELLE |
  
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Jul 19 06, 12:56
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Babylonian Posts: 114 Joined: 17-April 05 From: New Mexico Member No.: 110 Writer of: Poetry |
Yes, I did see and change your thoughts. It does make a better poem. Thanks AM
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ArtesiaMeeks Manual Exchanges Funless Jun 20 06, 12:25 
Cleo_Serapis Hi Carol.
Glad to see you posting a new poem!
... Jun 22 06, 19:49 Cathy Hi Carol,
Your title is very fitting. There are ... Jun 25 06, 09:18 
ArtesiaMeeks Hi Cathy,
My husband is now on kidney dialysis. ... Jun 25 06, 11:11 Cathy [quote name='ArtesiaMeeks' date='Jun 2... Jun 26 06, 16:40 AMETHYST Hello Carol,
Every poem is written for an special... Jun 26 06, 22:26 Cleo_Serapis Hi Carol.
Sorry for my delay in responding. I hop... Jul 9 06, 15:20 Don Hi Carol, good to see you here again.
You might w... Jul 9 06, 16:20 ArtesiaMeeks QUOTE(Don @ Jul 9 06, 21:20 ) 78358Hi Car... Jul 14 06, 10:26 Cleo_Serapis Hi Carol.
Just checking in - did you see both Liz... Jul 14 06, 11:28 poeticpiers I could relate to this,my daughter was on this kin... Jul 22 06, 08:25 AMETHYST Hi Carol,
This flows like warmed butter. You've ... Jul 22 06, 15:09 ArtesiaMeeks Hi Liz,
Thanks for the kind words. I can see the... Jul 24 06, 09:48 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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