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Jun 21 05, 09:15
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REVISION (With thanks to Nina)
NORTH WEST PASSAGE
Interrupted moonbeams dance on icebergs and trail their milk-white fingers in icy sea, accompanying emerald rhythms of the Borealis.
The blue-white stage emits a ghostly hue, evanescent and lambent by turns. In the vast silence, glaciers tower like cathedrals in the midnight sky.
Aboard The Erebus, an old salt, inured to the show; stamps his feet, breathes warmth into his calloused hands and dreams of hot tea, unwitting of his fate.
North-West Passage
Interrupted moonbeams dance on icebergs and trail their milk-white fingers in icy sea, accompanying emerald rhythms of the Borealis.
The blue-white stage emits a ghostly hue, evanescent and lambent by turns. In the vast silence glaciers tower like cathedrals in the midnight sky.
Aboard The Erebus, an old salt, inured to the show; unwitting of his fate, stamps his feet, breathes warmth into his calloused hands and dreams of hot tea.
(All rights reserved by Grace Galton as an unpublished work.)
Link below for information on John Franklin’s ill-fated expedition to find the North-West Passage.
http://www.mta.ca/faculty....in.html
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Jun 23 05, 08:13
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Hi Fran,
QUOTE I have to admit to shying away from this - a sign of how powerful the writing is - cos I get scared much too easily and cannot sit through disaster movies at all. I also hate the idea of icy, lifeless wastes. Took me three goes to get into Frankenstein cos of the chilly start. *shiver* So, yep, this did it for me, all right ... off to sit in the sun and thaw out now.
Well, it's good to know you felt the cold and the creepy atmosphere Fran. I too can't abide the cold but would put up with it just to see the Aurora Borealis in the Arctic Circle! Maybe one day!
QUOTE PS one thought ...
... vast creaking silence ... ?
erm, I know then it's not true silence, but the glacies and floes do creak, don't they?
Certainly they do Fran, but not all the time I think and I didn't want anything interrupting the vast silence, which is how I imagined it when I read the book. I agree that the word 'creaky' give a creepy atmosphere, but not the one I want here. The emphasis is on a lone sailor on watch while all his shipmates are down below enjoying thier vittals and tea. Thanks for dropping in Fran, much appreciated. :hsdance:
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Cybele NORTH-WEST PASSAGE Jun 21 05, 09:15 Nina Hi Grace
An intriguing mystery, thanks for the li... Jun 21 05, 12:16 Cybele Good morning Nina,
Thank you for dropping in to c... Jun 23 05, 01:59 Toumai Hi Grace,
I have to admit to shying away from thi... Jun 23 05, 03:27 Dear Grace,
My first, pre-read confusion was with... Jun 23 05, 09:22 Cybele Good Sir Knight
My first, pre-read confusion w... Jun 23 05, 17:21 Cleo_Serapis HI Grace.
I've enjoyed this one very much! ... Jun 26 05, 05:40 Cybele Good morning Lori,
QUOTEI've enjoyed th... Jun 26 05, 06:47 Jox Grace,
My apologies - i have meant to crit this o... Jun 26 05, 10:50 Cybele Hi James,
QUOTEMy apologies - i have meant to cri... Jun 26 05, 11:34 Nina Hi Grace
One suggestion for that tricky line:
ho... Jun 26 05, 11:44 Cybele Hi Nina,
QUOTEOne suggestion for that tricky li... Jun 26 05, 16:52 Nina my pleasure
Nina Jun 26 05, 16:56 Cleo_Serapis Congrats Grace on your Member Choice award winning... Dec 31 05, 11:03 Nina Hi Grace
Congratulations on your member choice aw... Dec 31 05, 17:27
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