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post Jun 19 05, 03:19
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A Poet in the World of Reality

Poets muse,
waiting:
for inspiration,
enlightenment,
perfection.

I’m impatient,
gossiping
outside school:
road works,
celebrities,
holiday horrors.

Poets feel.

I am touched by:
sunburn,
beggars,
gastric ’flu.

Poets notice:
prismatic sunbeams,
striking gossamer;
rainbow magic.

I wonder where
sodding scary spiders
crouch, waiting;
spinning in the shadows
menacing my existence.
So much debris;
so much fear.

Poets brave
the unimaginable:
writing it ...

I take:
children to school,
cat to vet,
recycling to dump,
offence ... too easily.

Poets take:
liberties,
lovers,
drugs,
forever deciding
where to place one ...
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         Stop
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© Toumai, 2005

Thanks, James, for much-needed pre-crit
 
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Guest_Jox_*
post Jun 19 05, 13:34
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Hi Nina, Fran,

>N>OK, bear with me, it could be that two nights of very little sleep don't do much for the brain cells and is affecting my thinking but I'll try and explain myself.  

That's horrid - sleep deprivation is very nasty. Empathy / Sympathy.

>N>When I said you the poet, you the mother/wife etc, I wasn't necessarily meaning you personally, perhaps I should have said "one" the poet or even better instead of you - me.  Maybe I don't see the satire, because in a lot of ways you could be describing me and a couple of the different sides of me that people see, the everyday and the poet.  Here on MM the side of me I show is Nina "the poet".  In the school playground or at work and even with my family it is the other more practical, side. Most of the people around me would be quite surprised at the sort of poetry I write as I don't tend to reveal that side to my work colleagues or parents in the playground. Yes, what you have written is exaggerated, but underneath is a "profound" (not sure if that is the word I really want) truth.  I didn't actually see the housewife, a lot of housework is drudgery and boring and a lot of chat trivial, but that is the reality of working and living, rarely do you have deep meaningful conversations in the school playground - it is all gossip.  I don't recommend you try it James, it would drive you mad.

LOL! I think we're all like that Nina - we'd like the dreamy life but have to plump for much mundane.

No, not being a parent, I didn't have to deal with all that but I've had plenty of mundane moments. Though I can't gossip - doesn't interest me to the degree I just can't do it. But you should be in many teachers' staff room at break time... back-stabbing and gossip galore.

Sodding - ok.

>N>My comments on the last verse were a pathetic attempt at humour that obviously fell flat on its face.  Time I had some kip me thinks.

May be time for sleep but you are most certainly not being pathetic. you're one of the very best critics on MM.

>F>Well I hope that is a clear as my sluggish brain now.

LOL Sleep well!

J.
 
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- Toumai   A Poet in the World of Reality   Jun 19 05, 03:19
- - Nina   Hi Fran A very interesting contrast between you, ...   Jun 19 05, 10:53
- - Toumai   Hi Nina, Thanks for the comments No, I haven...   Jun 19 05, 11:49
- - Jox   Hi Fran, Nina... Hey this is rare: Nina and I dis...   Jun 19 05, 12:06
- - Jox   We cross-posted there - I was working on my commen...   Jun 19 05, 12:07
- - Nina   Hi Fran, James OK, bear with me, it could be tha...   Jun 19 05, 12:41
- - Toumai   Hi Nina, I am so sorry you have been so hot and b...   Jun 19 05, 13:59
- - Nina   Hi Fran The tongue in cheek part, went right over...   Jun 19 05, 14:36
- - Eisa   Hi Fran Bravo! -- I think this is wonderful. ...   Jun 20 05, 05:05
- - Toumai   Hi James, Thank you very much for your help, both...   Jun 20 05, 10:38
- - Toumai   Hi Nina The tongue in cheek part, went right over...   Jun 20 05, 10:47
- - Toumai   Hi Snow, Thank you so much for your comments.   ...   Jun 20 05, 10:54
- - Nina   Hi Fran (I shall make a very poor protest poet if...   Jun 20 05, 11:37
- - Jox   Hi Fran, Nina... The "I'd really prefer it if...   Jun 20 05, 13:41
- - Nina   Hi Fran, James The "I'd really prefer it if y...   Jun 20 05, 13:54
- - Cybele   [b] Good morning Fran, This is a very interesti...   Jun 22 05, 02:29
- - Toumai   Hi Grace, Thank you so much for dropping by. Thi...   Jun 23 05, 09:13
- -   Dear Fran, I am shocked to see I have not yet com...   Jun 23 05, 10:31
- - Toumai   Dear Alan, Apologies for the delay in my reply he...   Jun 25 05, 11:52

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