Odd Socks Options

[Guest_Nina_*]

Odd Socks (revised)

A pair of odd socks
tucked in a drawer:
one blue,
one black flecked with white;
long ill-matched;
hidden in darkness,
never proudly displayed.

I should separate them;
initiate search for their mates.
Yet something stops me -
fear of change?
loneliness worries?
habit?

I’ve grown used to them paired,
so they lie
folded together;
one blue,
one black  flecked with white;
growing old
trapped.


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Odd Socks (original)

A pair of odd socks
tucked in a drawer:
one blue,
one black, flecked with white;
ill-matched for so long;
hiding in darkness
never proudly displayed.

I should separate them;
initiate search for their mate.
Yet something stops me -
fear for change?
thoughts of loneliness?
habit?

I’ve grown used to seeing them paired,
so there they lie
folded together;
one blue,
one black, flecked with white;
gathering dust,
growing old.

[Guest__*]

Dear 2B,

You worry about your first crit, and Nina has welcomed it.

May I just add, as a very experienced critter (so quantity is there, quality is another matter lol), that I would have been proud to write this crit, you are already a pro !

It is so easy to crit and reduce or destroy - you have NOT done this, you have offered alt views and ideas. When I crit I try to help bring out the facets of an almost-brilliant diamond, and you have done this here.

Summating it all at the end is something I mostly do too, because it can become rather bitty while cutting and honing, so the summary offers a clearer view, and makes it easy for the poem's creator to see your thoughts clearly and globally.

Well done, more power to your elbow (needed for scything ! lol)

Love
Alan