Electric Flashes Options

[Aphrodite]

In the quieting of    
night I sit in the company    
of demons pushing through  
my unmanageable mind...    
 
and like a vice,  
clutching my  
head fiercely    
to squeeze the unwanted    
debris consuming delicate  
space, I beg to discard the    
wildly persistent racket  
 
realizing,  
like terminal illness    
temporarily halting with    
diminutive hope,    
eventually it gnaws and gnaws,    
annihilating what was    
once unbroken.    
 
In moment's reflection  
my eyes fill with a reserve  
of hardened tears not shed  
from pitiless numbing,

then,
acquiescing    
transfixed by the blackness    
of ebony sprinkled with    
electric flashes,  
I become a lustrous  
shooting star,  
a shot in the dark  
then lost again.  
©Linda Balboni 2004

[Aphrodite]

Hi Linda,

Long time, no see; my fault.

I am beginnning to sport a spray can of paint like a camera to record impressionable moments.  So many blank walls—sound barriers for one—touted to be off-limits, but needing free comment...till commercial posters line the race track.

I enjoyed your verse, which deserves repeated readings out of respect; but am motivated to alter here and there, which normal readers tend to do.  Being off-limits for crit, this serves well as crit credit without crit.

Thanks and God bless,

Don

Hello Don~

How are you doing these days?
I have been MIA myself, as far as frequenting poetry forums.
I hope to be more visible in the near future.

As always, I appreciate your captivating dialogue regarding my poem.
A little complicated, but says what I wanted it to.    

Take care and hope to read you soon.

Blessings to you~
Lindi