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 Apr 7 19, 22:46
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 11,869 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in.  |
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The earth is filled but still we spread like vermin. Filling up the land and building castles on the dead. Foundations are just shifting sand engorged with detritus of waste and obsolescence. Plastics ride the emerald waves which once were chaste but now they lay upon high tide dead fish and birds. A darkened stole that festers with a rotting stench now lines each shore. Embellished bowl of sewage that will never quench the thirst of gluttonous mankind. A travesty we leave behind. ·······  ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner       |
  
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Sep 13 19, 05:58
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 20,450 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
A sonnet in perfect form, but I think most of your enjambments are distracting from the great message. Inversions, as in the final line, are things of old as well. Would you consider rewriting this piece. I think it's worthy of it. treading Lightly, Daniel
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Larry Just Desserts Apr 7 19, 22:46 
Larry Hi Daniel,
Not sure about your problem with enjam... Sep 19 19, 13:17 Psyche Hi Larry, great to post here again. I miss MM so m... Nov 13 19, 17:43 
JustDaniel Well, Larry, I have no idea what I was thinking th... Nov 19 19, 06:40 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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