Gifts, Tetrameter Sonnet Options

[Larry]

Gifts

When God encased my soul within
that embryo for life on earth
there was no mark or stain of sin
upon its face until my birth.

The gift He gave was mine to keep
until that time allotted me
when, worn and frail, that final sleep
assailed me with mortality.

What I have done throughout my days
which might dishonor or degrade
this vessel of the soul displays
the choices made. I’m unafraid

for souls are given to be healed
by precious blood that had been spilled.

[Larry]

Hi Jax,

I agree with you 100% that "Consonance" Rhyme is not the sound of the vowel in the stressed syllable but instead that of the opening and closing consonants which make the match.

Examples: tick, tack, tuck, tock - bit, bat, hot, hut

The problem is, we are comparing apples and oranges. I referenced "Consonantal" rhyme which matches "only" the sound that ends the syllable.

Examples: missing, bussing where the "ing" sound rhymes much like my usage of healed-spilled where the "led" ending of both words is the rhyme sound.

All this may be educational to some folks reading our back-and-forth but, to me, it detracts from the message I wanted to convey in my poem.

Again, I appreciate your input.

Thanks,
Larry