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 Jul 9 17, 08:20
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 11,722 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in.  |
Within the swamp are brackish pools
where gators wait for food and fools from towns and cities far away. Sometimes they stumble in to stay and ripen where the gator drools but that’s not taught in any schools. With knowledge and the proper tools some folks can work or live and play within the swamp. My friend gets rich. He and his mules go out to where bald cypress rules and finds old sunken logs which pay their weight in gold. Without decay these fallen giants are nature’s jewels within the swamp. Here it is Daniel, comment or crit at your leisure! Larry ·······  ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner       |
  
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Jul 9 17, 17:52
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 Babylonian Posts: 102 Joined: 22-June 17 From: Arizona, USA Member No.: 5,325 Real Name: Ali Zonak Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:none |
QUOTE (Larry @ Jul 9 17, 08:20 )  Within the swamp are brackish pools where gators wait for food and fools from towns and cities far away. Sometimes they stumble in to stay and ripen where the gator drools but that’s not taught in any schools. With knowledge and the proper tools some folks can work or live and play within the swamp. My friend gets rich. He and his mules go out to where bald cypress rules and finds old sunken logs which pay their weight in gold. Without decay these fallen giants are nature’s jewels within the swamp. Here it is Daniel, comment or crit at your leisure! Larry A fine write, Larry; great nature poem. I'm not sure though how old sunken logs can be worth, or pay their weight in gold, but it seems to work in your poem. Here in Arizona, in our Painted Desert, we have remnants of petrified forests--trees, that is. It's unlawful to remove even small fragment of those calcified logs. Enjoyed, Ali ······· ·······~~~~
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Larry Within The Swamp Jul 9 17, 08:20 
JustDaniel Another perfect rondeau, Larry...
and providing ... Jul 9 17, 14:32 Larry Hi Ali,
Thanks for popping in for a read. Let me... Jul 9 17, 19:37 
Ali zonak QUOTE (Larry @ Jul 9 17, 20:37 ) Hi Ali,
... Jul 10 17, 06:13 Larry Hi Ali,
I agree with your math but we are not tal... Jul 12 17, 22:37 JustDaniel weigh down inside:
Larry has a Cyprus log
lodged i... Jul 13 17, 03:31 Larry logged in to check
what our Daniel had to say;
woo... Jul 13 17, 21:59 JustDaniel cyprus chew, gnaw it
and spit out the cellulose;
w... Jul 14 17, 00:43 Larry watch out for silver
and spite the sell-out; you’l... Jul 14 17, 10:32 JustDaniel gnawing Cyprus chews
bides the time for cashing in... Jul 14 17, 14:15 Larry them thar golden logs
were hard for beavers to che... Jul 16 17, 22:09 JustDaniel left with gilt fillings
some beavers even lost tee... Jul 16 17, 22:46 Larry sucked gummy Cypress
from the swamps’ muddy water... Jul 17 17, 21:41 JustDaniel clinging to cold cash
muddy Cyprus hunter leaves;
... Jul 18 17, 10:50 Larry good day at the mill
follows a night in the swamp;... Jul 19 17, 08:02 JustDaniel lumbering around
with muddy, fresh Cyprus log;
gon... Jul 19 17, 13:53 Larry gone a million rounds
with nature and hurricanes;
... Jul 21 17, 13:56 JustDaniel sightly knees remain
hidden for husband to share;
... Jul 21 17, 14:50 Larry privates like their things
to stay squared away wi... Jul 24 17, 17:55 JustDaniel corporal punishment
is not suited for privates;
th... Jul 25 17, 12:50 Larry they proffer boxes
made with sawdust and cardboard... Jul 28 17, 17:54 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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