Within The Swamp, Rondeau Options

[Larry]

Within the swamp are brackish pools
where gators wait for food and fools
from towns and cities far away.
Sometimes they stumble in to stay
and ripen where the gator drools

but that’s not taught in any schools.
With knowledge and the proper tools
some folks can work or live and play
within the swamp.

My friend gets rich. He and his mules
go out to where bald cypress rules
and finds old sunken logs which pay
their weight in gold. Without decay
these fallen giants are nature’s jewels
within the swamp.


Here it is Daniel, comment or crit at your leisure!

Larry

[JustDaniel]

Another perfect rondeau, Larry...

and providing an inside look to a place where you are familiar and most are not.

The first stanza provides a quirking and dark look at the milieu of gators, including unsuspecting 'foreigners' who may become food for the drooling creatures with big mouths and lots of sharp teeth.

The second stanza ties up the first and provides a transition into the final stanza's explanation of one of the more lucrative 'businesses' in the swamp. Love it!

The second to the last line provides a nice variation to the perfect Iambic Tetrameter which you use consistently throughout the piece. Here, of course, you force the reader to squish "giant" into one syllable, which if perfectly acceptable in my book.

deLighting in your sharing.

Please have a look around to provide your careful and generous eye to their pieces.

expectantly, Daniel