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 Jul 2 17, 20:25
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 19,923 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori  |
To Meet With God
To meet with God in worship, I bow down to lift my voice and cry out, Holy Lord... I know Your rod of justice humbles me, who's flawed. Your grace is in the morning sky. I need Your Word so I'll apply it to my heart and to You fly with friends who meet, though we're too blah'd to meet with God. I say, Hello and do not lie, I'm glad to see you! But I sigh, I need some quiet to be awed... a moment just to rest my bod. I've mostly come here to draw nigh to meet with God. © MLeeDickensson 02 July 2017 during a sermon on Worship in church ·······  ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Jul 3 17, 07:32
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 Babylonian Posts: 102 Joined: 22-June 17 From: Arizona, USA Member No.: 5,325 Real Name: Ali Zonak Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:none |
QUOTE (JustDaniel @ Jul 2 17, 21:25 )  To Meet With God To meet with God in worship, I bow down to lift my voice and cry out, Holy Lord... I know Your rod of justice humbles me, who's flawed. Your grace is in the morning sky. I need Your Word so I'll apply it to my heart and to You fly with friends who meet, though we're too blah'd to meet with God. I say, Hello and do not lie, I'm glad to see you! But I sigh, I need some quiet to be awed... a moment just to rest my bod. I've mostly come here to draw nigh to meet with God. © MLeeDickensson 02 July 2017 during a sermon on Worship in church Hi there, Daniel; this looks like a nicely executed rondeau, even though I stay away from this form because I'm more of a teller of stories in ballad form. What makes me smile is your use of "informal" language like "bod, blah'd," in your personal communication with God. The line, "... it to my heart and to You fly," reads a bit awkward--but it's readable, and I don't think God is much of a grammarian. I can appreciate your footnote. Enjoyed,  Ali
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JustDaniel To Meet With God *** Jul 2 17, 20:25 
JustDaniel Thank you for your thoughtful visit, Ali.
Yes, I ... Jul 6 17, 13:18 
Psyche Hi Daniel,
Great use of the rondeau form. And yes,... Jul 25 17, 00:56 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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