Autumn Options

[greenwich]

The wayfarer finds himself in the Autumn room
The din of outside leaves invites the tremble of truth
The man's heart sinks, for he has no tidings
Many dark paths has he evaded
but the silence
of this room is like no other

[JustDaniel]

Greetings, Anthony!

Here I am again on the free verse side, since the other side has been so quiet... though I see there is a new piece there, and I'm anticipating posting there myself before the day's over.

What I do when I visit here sometimes is take a writer's piece and play with it, if for nothing else than practice for the potential of my own free verse.

I really don't know what the 'rules' are, since there don't seem to be many.

Please forgive any departure from your intentions, since I'm NOT TELLING YOU HOW YOUR PIECE SHOULD BE. I'm merely trying to develop MY OWN PERSPECTIVE on your poem.

My only specific 'correction' is the grammatical mistake in the last line, which could either be:
of this room is LIKE no other... or
of this room is unlike ANY other

Here is my playing with your words:

The wayfarer finds himself in the Autumn room
where the din of outside leaves invites the tremble of truth;
his heart sinks, for he has no tidings.
He has evaded many dark paths
but the silence
of this room is like no other.

As always, take or toss anything that is either within or is divergent from your own perspective.

deLightingly, Daniel

P.S. I almost forgot. You left the 'n' off of Autumn in the Title posted for this piece.