Autumn's Breeze, Huitain Options

[Larry]

Autumn’s Breeze

Forestall that chilling breath which augurs change
and pirouettes the leaves in slow ballets
on air. Your choreographies arrange
them on the ground in colors that amaze.
Spare some that early fate while summer wanes
to give the forests time to fully blaze
and me, warm afternoons in quiet lanes
to thank how nature's palette lets me gaze.



the last line did read: to see how nature's palette can amaze

[anaisa]

Hi Larry,

Nice to read your poetry again. This is a calm and beautiful picture you have captured in your words.
I just have one suggestion, that would be to possibly change the first word to "restrain"
Restrain that chilling breath which augurs change. To me, restrain sounds nice with the
last word "change" and forestall sounds a little dated. That's all (take it or leave it!)love the poem!



Forestall that chilling breath which augurs change
and pirouettes the leaves in slow ballets
on air. Your choreographies arrange