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 Jul 22 14, 01:29
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 783 Joined: 24-July 07 From: South Africa Member No.: 457 Real Name: Walter Schwim Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Mistral  |
The tour is far, the route adverse
our quests beset with balk and woe. Most outcomes of our toil obverse and greed shall tax what seed we sow. Today, great rivers test our mind that desert plains tomorrow be lush pastures vast and unconfined; more fertile than the plundered sea. Tomorrow’s walls we need transcend should man aspire to touch the stars; at cost mere kings can’t comprehend, untranquil mist our wisdom bars . . . Whilst dreams yet dreams may long remain, we’ll dream our God-games just the same. Edit 1  This sonnet peeps into mankind’s indomitable will to master his environment at all cost, against adversity and setback. Although the wisdom of such endeavors could at times be questionable, without dreams we are nothing. Copyright WW Schwim 22 July 2014 ·······  ······· |
  
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Aug 23 14, 03:32
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 783 Joined: 24-July 07 From: South Africa Member No.: 457 Real Name: Walter Schwim Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Mistral |
Kieth and Maggie, Thanks for popping in to read.
Lori, thank you for those suggestions re the grammar and punctuation. Always such a sharp eye  for these things and much appreciated.  I shall do a revision shortly.Hugz Wally ······· ······· |
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Thoth PAST MORTAL KEN Jul 22 14, 01:29 
jerryk Good morn, Walter;
enjoyed reading your deeply ref... Jul 22 14, 07:03 Thoth Hey Jerry
Thanks for stopping by to read. Your co... Jul 22 14, 07:24 
jerryk QUOTE (Thoth @ Jul 22 14, 05:24 ) Hey Jer... Jul 22 14, 10:44 Larry Hi Wally,
Glad to see you back and posting once m... Jul 22 14, 14:23 JustDaniel Please, Wally, will you post the first
edition and... Jul 23 14, 13:59 Psyche Hi Wally,
I've just read your poem and will n... Aug 1 14, 23:46 Thoth Hello Larry, Thanks for those suggestions you are ... Aug 2 14, 05:11 Keith Logan Wally,
As a simple rhymer I seldom (if ever) writ... Aug 5 14, 03:08 Cleo_Serapis Hi Wally,
A bit more serious sonnet in this love... Aug 18 14, 07:30 Maggie Sad yet beautiful, Wally. Love it!
Peggy Aug 22 14, 17:15 Cleo_Serapis Hi Wally,
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