Spring **, Sonnet Options

[Larry]

Spring

My love draws near; her breath upon my face
is scented balm to soothe her sister’s wrath.
I yearn to see her eyes, feel her embrace
but know that time restrains. The forest path

is still a lifeless track. Denuded trees
raise barren boughs as though they would entreat
her swift return. An antecedent breeze
which stirs the life held in their umber feet

beguiles me with its warm caress. She tempts
me with a taste of what will soon appear
when she reveals herself. Like forest nymphs,
arising from what’s left of winter’s bier,

she’ll dance through glens in diaphane and jade.
Until that time, I’ll smile at each charade.

[Thoth]

Hi Larry

That rhyme still worries me cause even the vowels don't really match. Both words are nasty for rhyme possibilities too so perhaps you should rework the last stanzas something like:

beguiles me with its warm caress and hints
of shooting buds that will in time appear.
When she reveals herself, seductive tints
of forest nymphs shall rise from winter’s bier

to dance through glens in diaphane and jade.
Till then, I’ll smile at each rehearsed charade.


Just some thoughts to keep the muse moving. T or T

Cheers,

Wal