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 May 11 13, 04:16
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 Nomad  Posts: 25 Joined: 9-May 09 Member No.: 793 Real Name: Jeanne Fiedler Writer of: Poetry Referred By:web  |
The busy rat race
of competition makes us angry, cold, and insincere The outer world brings trials of insensitivity the wanting of the material the luster of gold and white diamonds We need to face it embrace our bold, blue hearts bring out the delicate shimmering lily of gentleness We need to be soft and kind as the deer The baby fawn who puts her nose on our window The scurrying bunny quiet and peaceful her image of wonder scurrying peacefully about Our relationships will be totally unconditional if we add gentleness and look within our bright souls The song of sweetness, goodness and compassion will fill our spirits with energy and life |
  
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Jun 19 13, 05:53
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 Egyptian Posts: 327 Joined: 17-May 08 From: San Juan Puerto Rico Member No.: 508 Real Name: Sergio Ortiz Writer of: Poetry |
I like your poem, it is so true. There are some things I would do differently.
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jeannefiedler Gentleness May 11 13, 04:16 
Eisa Hi Jeanne
It's good to see you posting in the... May 13 13, 14:44 JustDaniel Greetings, Jeanne, and as Snow says, it truly is w... May 16 13, 09:05 Psyche Such a spiritual, gentle poem, Jeanne. And wishful... May 23 13, 17:05 Maureen I know animals are nicer than humans - and there a... May 23 13, 21:48 Psyche Jeanne, I'm back again!
I really wonde... Jun 19 13, 01:06 
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