OUR SAVIOUR FROM THE TORIES, Political posturing Options

[Alan]

OUR SAVIOUR FROM THE TORIES
(6 May 2010, general election date announced)

Sad profile of my bank account,
the complete texture of my life;
He’s sheltered me from much self-harm
by taxes, excised with state knife.

With His moonlight, in soft focus,
He spin doctors and tells us lies;
on balance I’m much better off.
Oh look, there is a pig that flies !

In short cameo performance,
He pretends he’s minister, Prime,
dispelling my prosperity :
Please, River Thames, drown His foul crime.

Alan McAlpine Douglas

Challenge words : profile texture shelter
moonlight balance cameo dispel river

[Sekhmet]

Alan - I am very very sorry to see your poem being Shanghaied into a discussion about critiquing style.
I humbly apologise. But please bear with us - you have, albeit unwittingly and unwillingly, sparked off an important topic for discussion.

Good morning Cleo.
A few early morning comments:

When a poem is offered in the critique section, they are, by implication, hoping to receive - critique.
Mosaic Musings is very strict about the importance it attaches to the use of critique to encourage poetic excellence. It is one of the reasons I joined - I needed to be told where I was going wrong.

There is, of course, no harm is slipping in a friendly personal comment, amongst the critique, .

But: to offhandedly dismiss both the subject of the poem and its content - and then, when challenged, to return to make a totally unrelated political statement of one's own, is abusing the enormous privilege we are given when someone offers us their work for criticism.

It is easy to see how many people have read one's poem, and draw one's own conclusions.
It is not essential to, 'just let them know that we have read it.'

Alan, You did a fine, heartfelt job with the challenge - although, for me, to give G. B. upper-case 'He's & Him's' still jars slightly. and distracts from the smooth reading - but seventy years of religious indoctrination have made me a trifle 'twitchy' on the subject.
Love, Leo