Reap What You Sow, working on rhyme & meter Options

[merle]

When my mother looked at me
her smile was wide but I could see
it didn't graze her eyes.

Much easier to bury seeds
beyond the rake of therapy
than ever question why.

When my daughter looks at me
my smile is wide but can she see
it doesn't graze my eyes.

[merle]

Hi Alan & Mary - Sorry for the delay in my reply. I'm trying to tackle one of the challenges and its kept me away.

Alan - I did intend to use the word 'graze' but now all I can think of are cows on a hillside chewing cud. 'Grace' is a good word, I'll give it some thought.

Mary - I like your optimisim! By all means call me Robin. I'll probably keep the 'loop' but make some changes to the final stanza. This one is definitely under construction.

Thank you both!