The Eleventh Hour of the Eleventh Day, X 10 for November 7th bySekhmet Options

[Sekhmet]

The Eleventh Hour of the Eleventh Day (1st revision)
Thanks Mary, Allan & Wally



Still they spawn those noble words;
those antique tales, that ancient story;
ringing out in Trojan ears; that
paean for death - or foreign glory.


'Here we stand!' - and - 'Here we fall!'
'They shall not pass !' 'The flag still waves!'
Democracy we'll give Iraq -
consigning thousands to their graves.

Loud, their pledge - 'We won't forget!'
Mouthed by men who never fought.
Heads held high, our young men march,
their youth and vigour brought to naught.

Still great men lay their poppy wreath; of
blood-soaked flowers, to hide beneath.





Still they spawn those noble words.
That antique tale ; that ancient story.
It rang out in the ears of Troy;
a peon to death - or foreign glory.


'Here we stand, and here we fall!'
'They shall not pass!' A flag to wave.
Freedom and peace we'll give Iraq;
yet send ten thousand to their grave.

And now, their pledge - 'We won't forget!'
Mouthed by men who never fought.
With heads held high, the young men go;
their youth and vigour brought to naught.


Still great men lay their poppy wreath,
with arrogance beyond belief.

10 Challenge Words used: Peace/freedom/noble/ grave/held/stand/wave/foreign/defend/glory

[Sekhmet]

Good morning Mary - Your time and trouble in analysing my verses are much appreciated. Having come back to this poem after a few days - I see exactly what you mean. I'll use your comments to take another look, and will certainly get rid of some of those small words – maybe go for more vitriol!
I did fully intend to use the word 'spawn', to describe my disgust for the slimy weasel words regularly pouring out from the mouths of our Politicians.

They hope that their slippery words will serve to promulgate, and give credibility to, their hypocritical attitudes about the horrifying loss of life caused by their own dictates; attitudes similar to those held by many generations of self-seeking Politicians.

Thanks for you comments –

Leo