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| Guest_alice_* |
 Jul 31 09, 11:44
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Harbour waters
I see me in my daughters face Alice44 |
  
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| Guest_ohsteve_* |
Aug 3 09, 16:21
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Alice, I already stated my trouble with Hiaku/ Senyru and number in your Hiabun post. I have rearranged a bit so IMHO it makes a bit more sense, still don't have the numbers, but hey, lets call it what Mark did, American Hiaku.
Harbour waters I see me in my daughters face Harbor waters mirror - 6 our faces - 2 I see me in her - 5 or Harbor waters - 4 mirror our faces - 4 I see me there - 4 Thats right your an Oz ...you spell harbor with a 'u', I picked up that habit in England with some words but not others, just like I picked up crossing my 7's with a bar through the middle as the Germans do. I sure hope to see more of your writing Alice. Of course these are just my two cents. Spend them or not. Steve |
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alice Haiku Jul 31 09, 11:44 
ace Alice:
Nice image. But even if you ignore the... Jul 31 09, 15:24 alice hi Ace..not sure I agree with balancing by numbers... Aug 1 09, 08:00 Cleo_Serapis Hi Alice44,
A nice image here in this one! I ... Aug 1 09, 08:07 alice Hi Cleo, I agree with the senryu..and this was wri... Aug 2 09, 08:37 Arnfinn G'day.
Love the imagery.
Regards,
John Aug 3 09, 04:58 Eisa Harbour waters
I see me in my
daughters face
Ali... Aug 3 09, 18:32 alice Steve, hi
I love how one ku can develop into so ma... Aug 4 09, 10:15 Cleo_Serapis Ooohhhh - I'm fond of this variation:
two fac... Aug 4 09, 13:44 Thoth Loved the image, It is getting us all inspired... Aug 4 09, 16:13 Eisa Hi Alice
I love both of your further thoughts on ... Aug 4 09, 16:40 alice Cleo, glad you liked it..I love how we can feed of... Aug 4 09, 19:11 alice Wally, I look forward to reading yours..
thanks so... Aug 4 09, 19:13 alice Snow thank you..
I find these forms difficult. It ... Aug 4 09, 19:17 JustDaniel Hey, Alice...
love what you're doing, and som... Sep 6 09, 18:57 
Larry Hi Alice,
Welcome to MM and the wonderful interac... Sep 7 09, 12:29 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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