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 Jul 8 09, 17:42
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 Babylonian  Posts: 87 Joined: 27-November 06 Member No.: 361 Real Name: Ross Baird Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Mysty  |
Been critiquing the haikus and sewnuru's of others...so felt I should give everyone a shot at one of mine:
Quiet
The morning despairs... silence across the table... a still death of love. ace |
  
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| Guest_prerna bala_* |
Jul 22 09, 05:30
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yeah, i think the haiku of yours captures the moment, but show us rather then tell us.
how would one feel despair, how would the haiku poet present it to the reader? i am curious how you would express that, and the sound of the silence, this is a real creative challenge for you, wow the sound of silence can be really expressed in such creative ways! rather impatient to read your revise good luck |
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ace Quiet Jul 8 09, 17:42 
Marc-Andre Germain Hi Ace,
You've captured a moment, and it... Jul 8 09, 21:56 Arnfinn G'day, Mate.
The morning despairs; >... Jul 27 09, 07:56 alice Hi Ace,
I believe haiku is a very visual art form... Jul 28 09, 09:20 Cleo_Serapis Hi Ace,
I'm still trying to learn these short... Jul 28 09, 20:00 Psyche Hi ace!
How strange it is that different line... Jul 31 09, 22:31 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Ace,
The problem with senryus is that what... Aug 1 09, 07:28 Psyche I absolutely agree with Peggy about the punctuatio... Aug 1 09, 13:00 
ace Peggy * Syl:
You are both completely correct. ... Aug 1 09, 16:35 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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