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 Jul 9 09, 02:25
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 Babylonian  Posts: 66 Joined: 14-May 09 Member No.: 798 Real Name: James Carver Writer of: Poetry Referred By:poppy  |
a heavenly feast
aromatic decadence when daffodils smile |
  
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Jul 9 09, 09:15
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 Greek Posts: 698 Joined: 29-May 06 From: US East Coast Member No.: 185 Real Name: Peggy Harwood Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:just wandered in |
Hi HF,
Welcome to MM!!!  It's great to have you with us!!! I like to write this kind of poetry too. I usually write a haiku as 5-7-5. I notice your first line doesn't conform to that syllable count. Was it an oversight or intention? I also notice an oversight on the last line: Since "daffodils" is plural, you need to say "smile" instead of "smiles." Again, welcome!!! It's great to have another haiku writer on board!! Peggy ·······  ······· |
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hellfire HAIKU Jul 9 09, 02:25 
Marc-Andre Germain QUOTE (hellfire @ Jul 9 09, 14:25 ) What ... Jul 9 09, 10:44 hellfire hi peggy
thanks for welcoming me.
i have made som... Jul 9 09, 11:58 hellfire hi mark
thanks for the info.
i am learning as i g... Jul 9 09, 12:02 Arnfinn G'day HF,
a heavenly feast
aromatic decadenc... Jul 13 09, 04:23 Marc-Andre Germain I have to disagree with John on two points here:
... Jul 16 09, 07:19 Arnfinn G'day Marc,
Thank you for your remarks RE: Ha... Jul 17 09, 05:45 Cleo_Serapis we have a discussion forum (Alexandria's Libra... Jul 19 09, 08:14 
prerna bala the second line confuses me , because i do not und... Jul 22 09, 05:25 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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