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 Jul 8 09, 04:08
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 Babylonian  Posts: 66 Joined: 14-May 09 Member No.: 798 Real Name: James Carver Writer of: Poetry Referred By:poppy  |
as winter begins
snowman,s excitement escapes through icy grin |
  
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Jul 8 09, 17:31
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 Babylonian Posts: 87 Joined: 27-November 06 Member No.: 361 Real Name: Ross Baird Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Mysty |
Hellfire:
I love reading and writing haiku; your is very nice. One nit...the first line seems to have only four syllables. Would it meet the requirements better if you said: "Winter now begins"? ace |
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hellfire Snowman Jul 8 09, 04:08 
Cleo_Serapis Hello Hellfire,
I enjoyed your winter Haiku (alt... Jul 8 09, 06:39 Marc-Andre Germain Hellfire, not too sure this is a haiku in the stri... Jul 8 09, 23:04 hellfire thanks cleo
will revise and see how it works.not ... Jul 9 09, 00:40 hellfire hi ace
thanks for the advice.
i am glad you enjoy... Jul 9 09, 00:43 hellfire hi mark
must admit not a haiku in traditional sen... Jul 9 09, 00:47 Arnfinn G'day, Hellfire.
as winter begins
snowman,s ... Jul 13 09, 02:57 
hellfire hi john
thanks for the comments and suggestion.
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