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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 11,717 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in.  |
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Three young men who bred cattle in France Chose a name for their place, not by chance. So as not to confuse, A small pun they did use; Which explained everything at a glance L5 did read: For they felt it explained at a glance ___________________________________________ *footnote removed - If you need an explanation, look at Mark's post! ·······  ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner       |
  
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Jun 12 09, 10:28
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,717 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
Hi Lori,
QUOTE Larry, what a fun limerick! I'm not convinced though there isn't another more informative title out there waiting to be used here, lol? The title is the punch line of the triple pun! Focus is where the Sun's rays meet and it is also where the Sons raise meat. If you can think of a more descriptive and inclusive title, please let me know. I will take a part of your suggestion and rearrange the sentence for the last line though. Thanks for the crit. Which explained everything at a glance. Larry ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner |
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Larry Focus Jun 11 09, 10:57 
Marc-Andre Germain Larry,
I'm afraid that this didn't make i... Jun 11 09, 11:49 Larry Hi Mark,
Yes, I know it is a Limerick and not a H... Jun 11 09, 15:02 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Larry,
I'm afraid this is too complex for ... Jun 11 09, 17:49 
Marc-Andre Germain Peggy,
In accentual-syllabic poetry, we count by... Jun 11 09, 19:42 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi,
Thanks for the review!!! Sometim... Jun 11 09, 19:54 Larry Hello Peggy & Hi again Mark,
Peggy, I appreci... Jun 12 09, 00:53 Marc-Andre Germain Peggy, I love Shakespeare, I think we'll have ... Jun 12 09, 04:49 Cleo_Serapis Hi Larry et al,
I tend to favor Accentual-syllabi... Jun 12 09, 07:52 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Larry,
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