 Skyline View [revised 29 Mar 2009], a haiku |
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 Mar 18 09, 17:02
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 Babylonian  Posts: 87 Joined: 27-November 06 Member No.: 361 Real Name: Ross Baird Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Mysty  |
White clouds stripe the sky as a jet skis beneath them, schussin snow swept peaks. ace Original third line: heading o'er mountains |
  
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Mar 29 09, 14:44
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Babylonian Posts: 87 Joined: 27-November 06 Member No.: 361 Real Name: Ross Baird Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Mysty |
John and Cleo:
You know what? I think I'll take a new course in spelling and typing before writing more stuff. I meant the third line to read: "Schussin snow swept peaks." I wanted to tie into the ski image, so the German word "schussin" seems appropriate and alliterative. Cleo I suppose this lies somewhere between a haikuand a senyru. Thanks again to both of you for your help. ace |
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ace Skyline View [revised 29 Mar 2009] Mar 18 09, 17:02 
Arnfinn G'day Ace,
Haiku, the poet writes about a mom... Mar 19 09, 01:22 ace Thank you, John. They are fun to write aren't... Mar 21 09, 14:46 Cleo_Serapis Hi Ace,
Isn't it fun to watch nature? I love ... Mar 21 09, 17:40 ace Cleo:
Thank you for the read and the comment. I ... Mar 27 09, 17:05 Arnfinn Hi Ace,
Nah, I don't think 'shussing... Mar 28 09, 04:53 Cleo_Serapis Hi Ace,
Not sure about 'shushing' - how a... Mar 28 09, 09:07 Cleo_Serapis Very nice Ace!
I think it is a haiku since y... Mar 29 09, 17:22 Psyche Hi ace,
This is indeed a lovely Haiku. But I conf... Apr 5 09, 23:16 ace Syl:
Have to admit my ignorance...don't kn... Apr 14 09, 14:49 
Arnfinn G'day Ross,
Dunno, about in mixing different ... Apr 21 09, 00:47 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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