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| Guest_prerna bala_* |
 Jan 14 09, 12:22
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revise 1
sloping roofs: splash slides for snow high noon sun ------------ splash! sound of molten snow waters down the cold |
  
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| Guest_prerna bala_* |
Jan 29 09, 16:09
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yes steve.
so the traditional one reads : splash of water drops from sloping roofs to ice grounds sun at work at noon! but i would also like to keep the form of the above one, so : Splash! sound of molten snow melting down the cold ----- what do you people think, Larry, Snow, Steve ? |
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prerna bala haiku Jan 14 09, 12:22 
Larry Hello Prerna,
As you've seen and replied to i... Jan 19 09, 15:43 
prerna bala Larry, i want the reader to hear the sound of wate... Jan 29 09, 15:56 Eisa QUOTE (prerna bala @ Jan 14 09, 17:22 ) s... Jan 22 09, 15:22 ohsteve Prenra, I unlike Snow have not heard of two forms ... Jan 26 09, 03:01 prerna bala hi Snow, i intend to rewrite it as a 5-7-5 and als... Jan 29 09, 16:01 ohsteve Prerna, they are both good, if snow is correct in ... Jan 29 09, 20:53 Cleo_Serapis Hello Prerna.
Is this your revision to post?
spl... Jan 30 09, 06:26 Larry Hi Prerna,
I had trouble finding your revision un... Jan 30 09, 12:54 prerna bala Steve, Cleo and Larry, thank you.
Steve, i want t... Jan 30 09, 16:28 Sekhmet Hello Perna balla Steve, Cleo & Larry.
For so... Feb 26 09, 14:03 prerna bala hi,
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