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| Guest_prerna bala_* |
 Jan 14 09, 12:22
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revise 1
sloping roofs: splash slides for snow high noon sun ------------ splash! sound of molten snow waters down the cold |
  
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| Guest_ohsteve_* |
Jan 26 09, 03:01
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Prenra, I unlike Snow have not heard of two forms of Haiku... This could be just considerd a very short poem, a stand on it's own thing. But even then that third line doesn't make much sense, I think you need just a little more content, and to me if you want a haiku you need that 5-7-5 sylable and usually a referance to nature.
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prerna bala haiku Jan 14 09, 12:22 
Larry Hello Prerna,
As you've seen and replied to i... Jan 19 09, 15:43 
prerna bala Larry, i want the reader to hear the sound of wate... Jan 29 09, 15:56 Eisa QUOTE (prerna bala @ Jan 14 09, 17:22 ) s... Jan 22 09, 15:22 prerna bala hi Snow, i intend to rewrite it as a 5-7-5 and als... Jan 29 09, 16:01 prerna bala yes steve.
so the traditional one reads :
splas... Jan 29 09, 16:09 ohsteve Prerna, they are both good, if snow is correct in ... Jan 29 09, 20:53 Cleo_Serapis Hello Prerna.
Is this your revision to post?
spl... Jan 30 09, 06:26 Larry Hi Prerna,
I had trouble finding your revision un... Jan 30 09, 12:54 prerna bala Steve, Cleo and Larry, thank you.
Steve, i want t... Jan 30 09, 16:28 Sekhmet Hello Perna balla Steve, Cleo & Larry.
For so... Feb 26 09, 14:03 prerna bala hi,
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