Poltergeist, lyric Options

[Merlin]

Here's a shorty, note that the writer and narrator are not the same.



Poltergeist

When evening shadows grope
over the boxwood hedge,
screeches careen into my ears
here in this blue-lit room
where twilight shelters me
but still that poltergeist appears.

There’s nowhere left I can run
and nothing more for me to do.
What’s that? I hear footsteps. *
There’s nobody here!
No-one is near,
no dreaded incubus, **
no evil voodoo spell,
no booze to paralyze my fear.


* formerly 1 sentence with comma.
** originally phantom incubus,
leading to probable tautology, thx Jax

[Maggie]

Hi Merlin,

I like your poem about the supernatural!! It would make a great poem for Halloween!

I have one grammar nit to pick: You have a run on sentence in S2. It can be easily fixed with a period instead of a comma, or you can change one word.

There’s nowhere left I can run
and nothing more for me to do.
What’s that? I hear footsteps, (The comma after "footsteps" is wrong.)
there’s nobody here!
No-one is near,
no dreaded incubus, *
no evil voodoo spell,
no booze to paralyze my fear.

1) You could say

What's that? I hear footsteps. ( Notice the period after "footsteps.")
There's nobody here! (Notice the capital starting "There's.")

2) or you could say

What's that? I hear footsteps, ( Notice I left your comma in.)
but nobody's here! (Notice I took "there" out and added "but.")

I enjoyed the read!!!

Peggy