Poltergeist, lyric Options

[Merlin]

Here's a shorty, note that the writer and narrator are not the same.



Poltergeist

When evening shadows grope
over the boxwood hedge,
screeches careen into my ears
here in this blue-lit room
where twilight shelters me
but still that poltergeist appears.

There’s nowhere left I can run
and nothing more for me to do.
What’s that? I hear footsteps. *
There’s nobody here!
No-one is near,
no dreaded incubus, **
no evil voodoo spell,
no booze to paralyze my fear.


* formerly 1 sentence with comma.
** originally phantom incubus,
leading to probable tautology, thx Jax

[jgdittier]

Dear Merlin,
Your postings are ever changing in both style and message that I feel no confidence in my comments. I've tried in the past to limit my comments to those that might help the writer based on my knowledge of his style.
My first comment then is, do Merlin, Rooster and Chanticleer have different styles?
What strikes me most is the use here of a rhyme scheme I haven't seen from you before. Your work seems to me in the past to be more limited by older forms.
Glad to hear that the writer and narrator are not the same.
Cheers, ron jgdittier