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Cathy
Silver Lining

Red rose reposed on velvet white,
a gem divined by errant knight.
She's flirty fresh, a queen of tarts;
collecting many captive hearts.

A breath of hope unfurls the blithe
red rose.  Reposed on velvet white,
as warming sunlight spotlights her
soft aura, she begins to stir.

What miracle ... that nature longs
to change the tune of winter's song;
red rose reposed on velvet white
and oh, it's such a precious sight.

A brighter future can be found
if we but take a look around;
with open-armed embrace, incite
red rose, reposed on velvet white.

Cathy Bollhoefer
copyright Dec2005




Nina
Hi Cathy

It is good to read a more positive, hopeful piece from you.  This exudes happiness and flirtatiousness.  

I hope you can find that brighter future.

Nina
Cathy
This took forever to write.  Everytime I started to write something down my mind would go off in another direction!  This is what I ended up with.  lol

I have learned that I must be content with myself, not rely on someone else for my happiness.  I will find that silver lining within my own cloud.  My future may not turn out to be what I had hoped for but that doesn't mean it has to be any less bright.

Thanks Nina,
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Don
Hi Cathy,

Image of a fresh red rose on velvet blanket of snow is unique.  

From what you said about your mind jumping to other paths.  I am glad you established the trunk from all the branches.

Thanks for allowing me the read.


Don
Cathy
Hi Don,

Image of a fresh red rose on velvet blanket of snow is unique.  

Well, maybe not all that unique ... but beautiful!

From what you said about your mind jumping to other paths.  I am glad you established the trunk from all the branches.

Is that what I did?? lol  I guess it did come together ok ... but it sure gave me fits.

Thanks for allowing me the read.

Your welcome!  And thanks for commenting!

Cathy
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JustDaniel
Well, I'd like to comment further, but you already worked in what I'd previously suggested, so I'll just sit here in the snow and admire the thing!

I hope that's okay with everyone else!

Lightly snigglin', Daniel  sun.gif
Cathy
Hi Daniel,

Don't sit there too long ... there is a danger of freeze!!  lol

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jgdittier
Dear Cathy,
I'm wont to read a poem the first time aloud as I most enjoy the flow of a poem. The silver lining of this poem is the bright feeling it leaves
with its charming images (charming is a word I rarely use) and hopeful closing.
As a light verser given more to poetic ploys than message, I hope your little highly successful poem leads your way in following it. You've chosen Mr. Frost's road! Good luck!
A thought of a light verser reading pure poetry- when reading aloud, enjambed end rhymes lose much of their impact but I believe alliteration and internal rhymes gain. Any thoughts on that?
Nicely done and cheers,    ron   jgd
Cathy
Hi Ron,

I'm wont to read a poem the first time aloud as I most enjoy the flow of a poem. The silver lining of this poem is the bright feeling it leaves
with its charming images (charming is a word I rarely use) and hopeful closing.

Thank you!  I like your choice of 'charming' in connection with the poem.

As a light verser given more to poetic ploys than message, I hope your little highly successful poem leads your way in following it. You've chosen Mr. Frost's road! Good luck!
A thought of a light verser reading pure poetry- when reading aloud, enjambed end rhymes lose much of their impact but I believe alliteration and internal rhymes gain. Any thoughts on that?

I sometimes prefer alliteration and internal rhyme.  It can sound much more 'natural' than end rhymes.

Nicely done and cheers,    

Thank you!  I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Cathy
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