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Cathy
It Won't Be Christmas ~ Quatern

It won't be Christmas without you
to crown the tree with shining star,
or string soft lights along the rail;
no hearth-side toast, you are too far

away to share the holiday.
It won't be Christmas without you
to cuddle close, no casting prints
upon the ground in snow drifts new.

My heart is cold without your warmth;
in need of incandescent source.
It won't be Christmas without you
to lead the carriage and white horse

that transports us to wonderlands
of glistening blankets in white hue ...
or is it tears through sorrowed sighs,
for there's no Christmas without you.

Cathy Bollhoefer
copyright Dec2005
Nina
Hi Cathy

I hope you do get to spend some time together in the near future, for a belated Christmas.  You have captured very well, how you feel being without him and the repeated line works very well and is a perfect tool to underline the emotion.

It Won't Be Christmas ~ Quatern

It won't be Christmas without you
to crown the tree with shining star,
or string soft lights along the rail;
no hearth-side toast, you are too far

away to share the holiday.
It won't be Christmas without you
to cuddle close, no casting prints
upon the ground in snow drifts new.

My heart is cold without your warmth;
in need of incandescent source.
It won't be Christmas without you
to lead the carriage and white horse

that transport{s} us to wonderlands
of glistening blankets in white hue ...
or is it tears through sorrowed sighs,
for there's no Christmas without you.


Nina
Cathy
Hi Nina,

I hope you do get to spend some time together in the near future, for a belated Christmas.  I wish ... I haven't heard from him in over a week.   You have captured very well, how you feel being without him and the repeated line works very well and is a perfect tool to underline the emotion.

Thank you Nina!

Cathy
JLY
Cathy,
This is well done and it tugs at one's emotions.....

in the following line, I am wondering who you are questioning, is it yourself or the subject of your affections?

or is it tears through sorrowed sighs,; I can interpret this line in two different ways.

You write with great feeling and the reader sense's that in you.

JLY
circumsolar
can't see a thing to change! lovely job you've done here and i'm keeping 'em crossed for you that you'll hear real soon :D
Cathy
Hi John,

This is well done and it tugs at one's emotions.....

Thank you!

in the following line, I am wondering who you are questioning, is it yourself or the subject of your affections?

I think I'm questioning myself ...

or is it tears through sorrowed sighs,; I can interpret this line in two different ways.

You write with great feeling and the reader sense's that in you.

Thank you John!  I sometimes think I shouldn't post poems like this but we can't be cheerful all the time.  Although I try.  I just don't want to come across like a whiner or worse!  lol

Thank you for commenting!

Cathy
Cathy
Hi circumsolar,

can't see a thing to change! lovely job you've done here and i'm keeping 'em crossed for you that you'll hear real soon  

Thank you!  For reading, commenting and for the finger-crossing.  Although I'm not sure it will help, it certainly can't hurt.  lol  It's been two weeks and I'm afraid there is something dreadfully wrong!  I'm trying to keep good thoughts at least.

Thanks for dropping in to read,

Cathy
Merlin
Having now read some of the replies, I see this is not about Santa Claus.

The best to you and yours over the holidays,

Merlin
Cathy
Hi Merlin,

Having now read some of the replies, I see this is not about Santa Claus.

*sad smiles*  No, it's not.

The best to you and yours over the holidays,

I wish the same for you and your family as well.

Thanks Merlin!

Cathy
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