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 Jan 5 06, 15:45
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr  |
EYES OF BLUE
Discarding frivolous flings I mulled passionate desires, longing for perfect love to quell fervent fires. For most of my life I wanted only you; your captivating soul beneath eyes of blue. Auburn hair cascades over luscious lobes, gently veiling treats I wish to delicately probe. Well versed in romance, infused with tenderness, my soothing embrace will engulf your loveliness. Pairing lyrical serenades with brilliant bouquets, my heartfelt melodies forever flavor your days. ·······  ·······Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays.
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Jan 5 06, 23:20
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 2,085 Joined: 24-May 04 From: Time, Immoral Member No.: 66 Writer of: Poetry |
Lovely, JLY.
No doubt this is 5 ft 2. Merlin ······· ······· |
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Jan 6 06, 00:46
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 883 Joined: 2-January 06 From: Washington State USA Member No.: 145 Writer of: Poetry |
QUOTE(JLY @ Jan. 05 2006, 15:45) Only because I have to crit. (meter is not my forte) My suggestions are for how I hear the rhythm of this nice piece EYES OF BLUE (only because I'm a painter and I needed a one syllable word)Discarding frivolous flings I mulled passionate desires, longing for perfect love to quell my fervent fires. For the most partof my life I wanted only you; your captivating soul beneath your eyes of blue. Auburn hair cascades over luscious lobes, gently veiling treats I wish to softly probe. Well versed in true romance, infused with tenderness, my soothing soft embrace will engulf your loveliness. May lyrical serenades meet brilliant bold bouquets, and my heartfelt melodies forever paint your days. Feel free (of course) to take any or leave all Cyn ······· ······· |
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Jan 6 06, 08:19
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr |
Cyn,
Thank. You have given me much to work with and I will be editing this piece in the very near future. JLY ······· ·······Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays.
Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner |
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Jan 6 06, 08:22
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr |
Merlin,
Actually, she is 5'7". JLY ······· ·······Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays.
Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner |
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Jan 7 06, 09:42
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Jly well mine is five foot two with eyes of blue but she has brunette hair with streaks fo grey all through... my hair, whats left of it is silver gray except the mustaches which is still somewhat blonde.... see my profile picture....lol. If you arent scareddy cat...loll. good soft light love piece I have not nits with it,
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Jan 7 06, 10:39
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr |
Steve,
Thanks; my once thick brown hair has receded and gone to gray...I am in my twilight years but I still have the proverbial spark. JLY ······· ·······Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays.
Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner |
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