>F>Ah well, we'll all get there some day ...
unfortunately we do indeed and each second we move closer, a cheerful thought not!
I ride forwards
on yesterday’s winds, --- nice use of yesterday/forwards
propelled into uncertainty --- soooo true!
by life’s variable currents. --- sounds like a bit of chaos theory there
that's life though isn't, totally chaotic
into a shower
of fading memories. --- interesting image; very original
echo in shadowy space: --- yep, that's my mind
yup, mine too, far to much shadowy space and cobwebs gathering
blown beyond reach
by turbulent winds. --- another nice image of us grasping around for something we once looked for
I travel onwards to tomorrow;
time slipping speedily
through spanned fingers --- scary stuff; brill
as I close the distance
on my destination.
time has this scary habit of slipping through one's fingers before you turn round to take breath. Where did 2005 go so quickly and the older you get the faster time appears to pass.
One last breath gasped
before oblivion. --- so make the most of the journey?
>F>Original and powerful take on the idea, thanks.
thank you very much
>F>One tiny nit: you use "winds" in S1 L2 and again S3 L5 (you could maybe change the 2nd to simply turbulence?)
drat! I had that originally as breeze and forgot the reason behind it so changed it to winds. I think turbulence would work well, thank you.
Thanks very much for your comments.