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post Aug 9 05, 16:07
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Argh!

I am holding my hands over my ears, arghing.
I'll scream again -
                           argh -
                                      but
                                             you
                                                     can't
                                                              see
                                                                     or
                                                                          hear.

I'm too polite; not wanting to hurt your feelings;

                                        if
                                  I erupted,
                               it would only
                            make things worse.

But oh! To have leapt, like you, from the womb,
replete with the sum total of knowledge in the universe:
scientist, artist, wit, wag and all things double you.

I wish I could let rip;
I'm plastic faced,
stiff as tulle,
and as transparent.

I am  dakhma;
        Trappist;
        bit-lipped;
        as a grave.

Right, that's it,
you've done it now.
I'm going to be he-rude-ite;
construct an argument so nice;
dense, devilish, daedal,
that once lured in,
you will never escape ...

I wish ...

Argh!


First Version
Argh!

I am holding my hands over my ears and arghing.
I'll scream again -
                           argh -
                                      but
                                             you
                                                     can't
                                                              see
                                                                     or
                                                                          hear.

I'm just too polite; not wanting to hurt your feelings;

                                        if
                                  I erupted,
                               it would only
                            make things worse.

But oh! To have leapt, like you, from the womb,
replete with the sum total of knowledge in the universe:
scientist, artist, wit, wag and all things double you.

I wish I could let rip;
I'm plastic faced,
stiff as tulle,
and about as transparent.

I am  dakhma;
        Trappist;
        bit-lipped;
        as a grave.

Right, that's it,
you've done it now.
I'm going to be he-rude-ite;
construct an argument so nice;
dense, devilish, daedal,
that once sucked in,
you will never get out ...

I wish ...

Argh!




 
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Psyche
post Aug 9 05, 22:09
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Hey Mike !

Happened on this just before bedtime ! Wow... it's kind of refreshing to read a transgressor like u !! It gets better & better (I admit the beginning didn't exactly attract me...).

But then....

I wish I could let rip;
I'm plastic faced,
stiff as tulle,
and about as transparent.

I am  dakhma;
       Trappist;
       bit-lipped;
       as a grave.

Right, that's it,
you've done it now.
I'm going to be he-rude-ite;
construct an argument so nice;
dense, devilish, daedal,
that once sucked in,
you will never get out ...

I wish ...

Argh!


Fantastic !! Shall return here when my eyes stop falling out of their sockets.

Argh !!

Sylvia  Shock  :p  :ring:


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post Aug 10 05, 01:02
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Hi Mike

Ah, you have summed up the story of my life.  I've been there done that so many times that I've worn out the tshirt, saying nothing wishing I was brave enough to say what I feel, but only thinking about all the things I should have said once I have walked away and also knowing it would achieve nothing to let rip.  

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I am holding {my} hands over my ears[,] {and} arghing.
I'll scream again -
                          argh -
                                     but
                                            you
                                                    can't
                                                             see
                                                                    or
                                                                         hear.

I'm {just} too polite; not wanting to hurt your feelings;

                                       if
                                 I erupted,
                              it would only
                           make things worse.

But oh! To have leapt, like you, from the womb,
replete with the sum total of knowledge in the universe:
scientist, artist, wit, wag and all things double you.  (.......I don't get what you mean by double you)

I wish I could let rip;
I'm plastic faced,
stiff as tulle,
and {about} as transparent.

I am  dakhma;
       Trappist;
       bit-lipped;
       as a grave.

Right, that's it,
you've done it now.
I'm going to be he-rude-ite;
construct an argument so nice;
dense, devilish, daedal,
that once sucked in, (.......perhaps swallowed instead of sucked in)
{you} will never {get out}[escape] ...

I wish ...

Argh!


I enjoyed the read and one day I too will manage to construct a brilliant argument and astound myself.

Nina




 
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post Aug 10 05, 11:53
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Hi Sylvia

Me, a transgressor? Surely not. Can I have a special transgressor badge?

Glad you enjoyed it.

Cheers

Mike
 
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post Aug 10 05, 11:55
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Hi Nina

This was an incident at work when I but my lip instead of taking the easy option and ripping into them.

I like your changes so I'll have a go at them later on.

Cheers

Mike
 
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post Aug 10 05, 19:15
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Tee hee! grinning.gif

Why is it SHE always has the last word? ???

Never mind...

This is a very cool piece Mike! I like how you've shaped eah stana giving focus to the most important aspects.

I'll be back again soon - right now I can't see anything to nit... cool.gif

Cheers!
~Cleo :D


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post Aug 11 05, 04:35
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Hi Cleo

Thank you very much.

Cheers

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post Aug 11 05, 12:55
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QUOTE(Billydo @ Aug. 10 2005, 14:53)
Hi Sylvia

Me, a transgressor? Surely not. Can I have a special transgressor badge?

Glad you enjoyed it.

Cheers

Mike

Hi Mike !  :sun:

Yes, a poet transgressor !! (don't know what u do elsewhere... oops.gif )

And that's a great idea, let's have an Award for transgressors. I hereby propose to Lori (beep beep, Looooooooooooooooooori.....??) that she add a plaque to her long list of awards: one for super original stuff, cool layouts, nothing trad,
inventive language and whatever else constitutes lawlessness in verse...  

[marquee]:p  :alien:  :medusa:  :upside:  :wizard: [/marquee]

As far as I'm concerned, you've earned your badge already    :cool:

Check ya later,
Syl  :turtle:


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"There is no life higher than the grasstops
Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind
Pours by like destiny, bending
Everything in one direction."

Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights.



Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!

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post Aug 11 05, 19:19
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QUOTE(Psyche @ Aug. 11 2005, 13:55)
Hi Mike !  sun.gif

Yes, a poet transgressor !! (don't know what u do elsewhere... oops.gif )

And that's a great idea, let's have an Award for transgressors. I hereby propose to Lori (beep beep, Looooooooooooooooooori.....??) that she add a plaque to her long list of awards: one for super original stuff, cool layouts, nothing trad, inventive language and whatever else constitutes lawlessness in verse...  

[marquee]:p  alien.gif  medusa.gif  upside.gif  Wizard.gif [/marquee]

As far as I'm concerned, you've earned your badge already    cool.gif

Check ya later,
Syl  turtle.gif

Psssstt - oh Psyche ....

Why GollY! I know the PUUURRRRFECT  :kitty: award!

The Faery Award fits your idea here.....
Idea.gif

Whatcha think?
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings

Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind.

"I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter

Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!

"Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.

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post Aug 16 05, 16:16
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Hi Cleo

Thanks you very much. I'm pleased you enjoyed my transgression.

Cheers

Mike  :devil:
 
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post Aug 16 05, 22:15
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Hi Cleo !   sun.gif


Psssstt - oh Psyche ....

Why GollY! I know the PUUURRRRFECT   award!

The Faery Award fits your idea here.....


Whatcha think?



Arghhhh !!!!  Speechless.gif  :p  ghostface.gif

But if ya ain't got anything more transgressive for this rebel called Mike, then it's the Faery Award, definitely. I shall try to find my way back to the Nom's forum right away... and once there, I shall make one of my own transgressive suggestions for Noms that nobody takes note of....ha...ha....  oops.gif  upside.gif

Arghhhhh......!!!

Wonderful poem, Mike, don't mind me, I'm the one that starts arguments and then slips off to have a beer with me pals...  grinning.gif  cheer.gif

Best,
Sylvia  turtle.gif






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"There is no life higher than the grasstops
Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind
Pours by like destiny, bending
Everything in one direction."

Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights.



Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!

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post Aug 17 05, 02:21
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Ooh ta!

I'm of to the Lake District to wander lonely with my Pink Things
in th'ills for a few days.

Catch yer at weekend.

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Hi Mike....

I take it your yellow things are already there? (Somewhat unseasonally).

Have fun.

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Ta James

Just killin' time while they complete their ablutions ... snore.

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post Aug 17 05, 03:40
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M,

You haven't built them a bathroom each??? Rod for your own back, if you ask me!

J.
 
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post Aug 19 05, 05:21
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Congrats Mike on your faery award winning tile! claps.gif

Well done! PartyFavor.gif Balloons.gif

~Cleo :)


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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings

Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind.

"I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter

Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!

"Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.

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post Aug 19 05, 06:44
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Hi Mike

Congratulations on your Faery Award for this poem and the reminder of how I have felt many a time - Argh....

Nina
 
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post Aug 19 05, 07:23
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Well done Mike - "Join MM and get a Free Faery" - now how's that for an offer?

Hope the Lakes' trudging is going well.

All the best, J.
 
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post Aug 19 05, 08:26
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Congratulations on a well deserved award!!
 
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Congrats on you latest award.

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