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 Jun 14 05, 17:02
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Dear Nina,
Not bad. How about A trace of me rests within you ? or with you .... Love Alan |
  
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| Guest_Nina_* |
Jun 14 05, 17:17
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Hi Alan
A trace of me rests within you ? or with you .... mmm, not within you, but maybe with you. thanks |
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| Guest_Jox_* |
 Jun 14 05, 17:28
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Hi Nina,
My trace...with you any use? (rests is a bit strange as one is dead and one is intangible, save for the stone which isn't really resting). J. |
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| Guest_Nina_* |
Jun 15 05, 01:25
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Hi James, Alan
other words that come to mind instead of rests are lingers, remains, stays. Help!!!! :wall: Nina |
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| Guest_Nina_* |
Jun 16 05, 16:25
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I've made some revisions now. Please tell me whether or not the last verse works now.
Nina |
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| Guest_Jox_* |
Jun 16 05, 16:51
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Hi Nina,
Yes, I do believe that the final verse now works well - well done. I just could not see a way forward. The new verse is simple, direct and very effective - and has pathos because of that. Well done, J. |
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| Guest_Nina_* |
Jun 16 05, 17:08
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Hi James
thank you, much appreciated. I'm relieved that I got there in the end.  Nina |
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Aug 19 06, 10:54
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Congrats Nina on your wizard award winning tile!
 Well done!   ~Cleo :) ·······  ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
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| Guest_Cathy_* |
Aug 19 06, 14:44
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lol... We've got to stop meeting like this! ...lol
Congratulations yet again!  Cathy |
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Aug 19 06, 16:58
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Well done again Nina! You have certainly written some great works.
Snow ······· ·······Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way.
Laugh loud & often - it's medicinal. Write from the heart - it's therapeutic. Beauty comes from within - the outer is just skin! Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here! MM Award Winner    |
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