Dear Ron,
Ya done well, it being out of your usual style.
The line Sue mentioned needs an overhaul, not because I say so, but because you're not holding to your own pattern given above. Plain and simple, it starts weak.
Suggested re-write could be: Never to tempt or advise you my dear,*
Thataway, you'd maintain NEV-er without question, it never is nev-ER.
There tis
Merlin
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