Hi there, Jeanne; Your poem's subject must have been of great appeal to you, and no effort is ever wasted, but I would agree with Steve's assessment. On a personal level, somehow, your philosophical questions do not quite draw me in, although I, too, like to look into the night sky and ponder the origin of the universe and life. As is, your poem contains a laundry list of generalities; re-reading it, after some time has past, can give you a new perspective and you'll be able to tweak it. Take care, JerryK.
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