Well done, John...
and I think you ought to offer this for critique. I thing it's worthy of taking a little more time with it without the constriction of the words given... even though you sewed them in very nicely!
... and of course you've been missed in the critique forums... like a lot of other folks.... hint, hint...
deLighting in your sharing, Daniel
Daniel,
Thank you; it has been a very busy year. My wife has had many health issues; we sold our house and moved into a smaller home and time has just slipped by.
Hope to be back active again as I have managed to write quite a few things.
JLY
Hello John,
It is so nice to see you back and answering challenges once more. I agree with Daniel that you should post this for critique. It is a beautiful story and from what I gather, probably true to life.
Mine is a bit shorter and mostly tongue-in-cheek but the idea came from the given words.
Great job,
Larry
Larry,
Thank you. It is not a true story, however, some of the images are ones that I observed.
I always polish up these challenge poems because I find the words are often restrictive and I replace some of them to make it better in the end.
JLY
Hi John,
It's so nice to read your poetry again! I always see a scene so vividly in my mind.
Enjoyed this,
~Cleo
Lori,
Thank you. I had a topsy turvy year and I need to get back to writing.
JLY
I can do relate!!! Mine was even longer.
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