 Green Grass and Dew, ( metrical poem -tetrameter) |
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 Apr 27 05, 23:35
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 764 Joined: 18-October 04 From: Sabah, Malaysia Member No.: 80 Writer of: Poetry  |
Green Grass and Dew
Ah, in the silence of the night as spectral moon is round and bright, I wake to hear a linnet cry, beneath the still and star-filled sky. But in the broader light of day, I pass my pretty flowers' display ; green grass is soft beneath my feet. I love the birds, their soft tweet-tweet. Now in the stillness of my heart, there is a song at morning's start, which now I bubble out to you, who loves green grass and dayspring dew. Agatha Lai ·······  ······· |
  
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Apr 29 05, 03:02
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Hi Aggie,
You have caught the essence of the early bird's dawn chirping to become one's guide for the start of a new happy day. Larry |
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 Apr 29 05, 03:09
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Hi Agatha,
This was in for crit wasn't it. Is this here now because it is your finished version? Thanks for posting. James. |
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May 2 05, 18:45
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 764 Joined: 18-October 04 From: Sabah, Malaysia Member No.: 80 Writer of: Poetry |
QUOTE (Zeus˛ @ April 29 2005, 04:02) Hi Aggie, You have caught the essence of the early bird's dawn chirping to become one's guide for the start of a new happy day. Larry Hi Larry, A start of a new happy day is everyone's prayers, Larry. Thanks for dropping by to read.  Aggiel ······· ······· |
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May 2 05, 18:47
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 764 Joined: 18-October 04 From: Sabah, Malaysia Member No.: 80 Writer of: Poetry |
QUOTE (Jox @ April 29 2005, 04:09) Hi Agatha, This was in for crit wasn't it. Is this here now because it is your finished version? Thanks for posting. James. Hi James, Yes, it's now a finished version, thanks to all the crits. Best wishes Aggiel ······· ······· |
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May 3 05, 05:15
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Very lovely and polished Aggie!
 Your poem has a softness to it - a very comforting melody. Well done! ~Cleo :pharoah2 ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
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May 13 05, 06:25
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 764 Joined: 18-October 04 From: Sabah, Malaysia Member No.: 80 Writer of: Poetry |
Hi Lori,
I am happy you like my poem. Thanks a lot. All the best Aggiel ······· ······· |
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May 28 05, 12:27
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 Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 1,250 Joined: 2-August 03 From: USA Member No.: 7 Writer of: Poetry |
Hello Agatha~
I enjoyed your playful piece and the sense of childlike wonder within your rhyme. Sweet and dreamy! Ah, in the silence of the night as spectral moon is round and bright, Take care~ Lindi ······· ·······"Imagination is more important than knowledge and encircles the world"
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May 31 05, 10:09
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Babylonian Posts: 114 Joined: 17-April 05 From: New Mexico Member No.: 110 Writer of: Poetry |
Aggie,
Lovely, lovely, lovely......what a nice flow and read. ArtesiaMeeks |
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May 31 05, 12:18
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Dear Aggie,
This is indeed lovely and soft. Trouble is, I know a wicked poet who loves to spoof, and whose eye this has caught. His mind wandered when he read your title, and saw it as GREEN GRASS AND YOU. Check out the poem that resulted, unless you are likely to be mortally offended .... Love Alan |
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May 31 05, 20:29
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 764 Joined: 18-October 04 From: Sabah, Malaysia Member No.: 80 Writer of: Poetry |
Hi Lindi and Carol,
What a lovely surprise to see you two at my thread. I didn't check this for sometime. Thanks for the sweet comments.  Aggiel ······· ······· |
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May 31 05, 20:31
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 764 Joined: 18-October 04 From: Sabah, Malaysia Member No.: 80 Writer of: Poetry |
QUOTE (Alan @ May 31 2005, 13:18) Dear Aggie, This is indeed lovely and soft. Trouble is, I know a wicked poet who loves to spoof, and whose eye this has caught. His mind wandered when he read your title, and saw it as GREEN GRASS AND YOU. Check out the poem that resulted, unless you are likely to be mortally offended .... Love Alan Hi Alan, Not me. I am proud a good poet like you think my poem is worthy of a spoof.  Aggiel ······· ······· |
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 Jun 4 05, 12:23
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,802 Joined: 24-April 04 From: Connecticut Member No.: 58 Real Name: Ron Jones Writer of: Poetry |
Dear Aggie,
Just read your poem aloud! Better still, recite it! Cheers, jgd ······· ······· |
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Jun 10 05, 19:43
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 Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 1,547 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Jeddah, Saudi Arabia Member No.: 13 Real Name: Daniah Writer of: Poetry |
Aggie,
This spilled with the freshness of a sweet soul. The images enchanting and rhyme scheme flowing like a waterfall. Lovely read. Thanks dani ······· ·······Happiness is a journey, not a destination.
"A good book is not read and forgotten. It lingers in the mind of the reader, reshaping thoughts, asking new questions, revisiting ancient ones." MM Award Winner |
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