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post Apr 18 05, 20:14
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On The Mountain    

This craggy faced mountain
propelled up from the millennia,
striped with dark layers, bold cliffs
obscured history, locked in place.

Impregnated with fossils,
remnants of lost life
yielding up ancient thoughts,
still… so  dormant it stands.

Paleo clues, hidden  bone fragments
a few small creatures, inhabit now
clouds almost touching my fingertips
misting ever so lightly.

Climbed this peak exploring,
hoping, curious :

Holding…
an empty hourglass,
looking  for the sand of time.
 
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post Apr 19 05, 01:35
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Hi Larry,

What a powerful tale of a mountain. I love the idea of it being propelled up thru the millenia (like the Andes or Himalayas - growing as the tectonic plates squish together - note scientific terminology: 'squish') and the clouds so close. A wonderful mix of history and natural history. And no back-pack required.
Thanks for the journey. :pharoah2

Fran
 
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post Apr 19 05, 02:09
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Hi Larry,

Well done!

I agree with Fran's comments. in addition, I think that the final verse is fab. I love the concept of a solid mountain of rock's progress being measured in terms of its particles.

Well done, my dear chap - super stuff.

James.
 
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post Apr 19 05, 06:38
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Hi Fran,

this was a piece I wrote last year, during a moment of
enlightenment.
Glad you enjoyed it.
Larry
 
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post Apr 19 05, 06:39
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Hi James,

Shall we go mountain climbing?

Maybe we will discover a new species. grinning.gif

Thanks for your comments and stopping in.

Larry sun.gif
 
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post Apr 27 05, 23:41
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Hi Larry,

So happy to bump into this master piece.

Agreat read.

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post Apr 29 05, 03:07
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Hi Aggie,
Thanks for your kind comments. Ready to go mountain climbing
and look for some of the past?

Larry
 
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post May 2 05, 18:51
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QUOTE (Zeus˛ @ April 29 2005, 04:07)
Hi Aggie,
Thanks for your kind comments. Ready to go mountain climbing
and look for some of the past?

Larry

Hi Larry,

Moutain climbing is too  great a project for me.
May be some mole hills will do.  :jester:

Best,

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post May 3 05, 05:16
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I remember this one Lar. grinning.gif

I enjoyed it even more this time 'round! hsdance.gif

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post May 3 05, 06:33
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Hi Larry

This poem was a delight to read.  I have just been to Tenerife and been up to the top of Mount Teide and your poem fits the images from that trip perfectly.

I like the idea of the mountain's longevity, holding secrets of earth's history and ourselves being just a grain of sand in relation to the lenght of time the mountain has existed.

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post May 3 05, 06:47
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Hi Larry,

Speaking as one of the most recent "new" species to have been discovered, I think I'll remain in my environment, reading of pluckier souls up high, thanks. But do visit!

James.
 
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post May 28 05, 12:41
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Hey Larry~ wave.gif

How are you doing? This is such a reflective piece with alliteration as outstanding as mountains and lifetimes!

Paleo clues, hidden  bone fragments
a few small creatures, inhabit now
clouds almost touching my fingertips
misting ever so lightly


Such a poignant and strong poem! sun.gif  sun.gif

Take care~
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post Jun 4 05, 05:24
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Lori, Nina, Jox, Lindi,

Thank you for your warm comments.
This was a piece that came out of nowhere, and just seemed
to fall in place.

Larry
 
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post Jun 4 05, 06:34
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Larry,
I just got around to reading this one and I was blown away by these two lines:

Impregnated with fossils,
remnants of lost life


Excellent!
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Hey Larry,

You have some great imagery here, but what stuck me was this part:

clouds almost touching my fingertips
misting ever so lightly.

It had a sensual touch to it.

Loved it
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