 Aesop's "The Fox, the Cock and the Dog" restated, Ballad meter |
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  Feb 13 05, 08:58
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 1,802 Joined: 24-April 04 From: Connecticut Member No.: 58 Real Name: Ron Jones Writer of: Poetry  |
Around the chicken coop he'd prance,
his thinking wry and sly. Then to its roof a sudden glance- a cock against the sky... His brain began a baneful bent, his words were false and foul. "King Lion has a truce now sent", "No predator aprowl." The cock seemed pleased and looking far, he claimed a canine nearing. He'd tell that mutt those words bizarre but fox was disappearing! ·······  ······· |
  
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| Guest_Nina_* |
Feb 13 05, 10:33
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Hi Ron
an excellent retelling of the fable that flowed really well. My only suggestion is that you provide a link to the original fable to make it easier for those of us who have never heard of the original to go and read it. Nina |
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Feb 14 05, 11:20
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,802 Joined: 24-April 04 From: Connecticut Member No.: 58 Real Name: Ron Jones Writer of: Poetry |
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| Guest_Jox_* |
 Feb 14 05, 20:44
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Well done, Don.
An interesting take on an old tale. Thanks for the link to the original, too - like Nina I had no idea about your inspiration-source. James. |
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Feb 28 05, 09:02
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,560 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
The link was most helpful, Ron
and I liked the line his words were false and foul. I think you know how I read 'foul'  Pretty good recasting, Ron... with the original cast! Lightly, Daniel :sun: ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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