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  Jan 26 04, 21:02
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 Babylonian  Posts: 80 Joined: 25-January 04 From: Alpharetta, Ga. Member No.: 52 Real Name: Elaine Crump Writer of: Poetry  |
Mortal,
should you pass our way at amber gloaming's end, when the fire of day fades to dusk and purple mist descends, Look closely, through a window seeming darkly spinning see, imperfect liquid glass, a waking mystery! The emerald glow of chambers deep where rivers flow; then widen to sleep: a promise you'll find within. Listen, softly singing, one note---repeating. Come closer, mortal. Of earthly tone, however fair; of mortal love, none compare. Seek thy solice within my arms. I call you, now, by my charms; lest you wake to find me gone. If so, remember.... Mortal, should you pass our way, come not at twilight; for by chance or whim or purpose true, we keep forever those who do! ·······  ······· |
  
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Jan 27 04, 09:22
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A charming little poem-the last verse is superb
 Gerry. PS Elaine sorry I forgot to give you a big welcome. I didn't recognise your name 
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Jan 27 04, 10:05
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Babylonian Posts: 80 Joined: 25-January 04 From: Alpharetta, Ga. Member No.: 52 Real Name: Elaine Crump Writer of: Poetry |
Thanks for the Welcome. I'm still finding my way around here. Lovely site. Happy writing! :cheer:
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Jan 27 04, 17:09
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Lady and WELCOME TO MM!
   What a great mystical piece this gem is! :dance: :sun: The repetition in all the right places really works well! :detective: :cloud9: I could imagine myself being swept away in the dreams. Well done!  ~Cleo :pharoah: ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
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Jan 27 04, 19:43
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Babylonian Posts: 80 Joined: 25-January 04 From: Alpharetta, Ga. Member No.: 52 Real Name: Elaine Crump Writer of: Poetry |
Thanks, Cleo! Looking forward to reading more of everyone's work. :)
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Jan 28 04, 21:05
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Hi Elaine, welcome to MM,
A mysterious, intriguing and mystical piece. Larry |
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Jan 30 04, 11:44
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 I enjoyed reading this very much! This poem captures the imagination, and the finish is most wonderful~ So very beautifully written! Thanks for sharing
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Mar 24 05, 21:45
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 Assyrian Posts: 203 Joined: 3-August 03 Member No.: 11 Real Name: Beth Writer of: Poetry |
Well, Dear Lady,
I am utterly ENCHANTED!!! Oh to traverse into the faerie kingdom! Sigh. SUch mystery. Such elegance of phrase. I think I need to go play with my Tinkerbell doll. Excuse me please. Nef ······· ·······I am who I am.
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