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 Aug 30 03, 08:42
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep  |
The Diamante is fun and challenging poetic form. This form was invented by Iris Tiedt, and is shaped like a diamond. The rules don't control the number of syllables; they control the parts of speech used.
The purpose of a diamante is to go from the subject at the top of the diamond to its opposite subject at the bottom. The structure is: line 1 - one noun (subject #1) line 2 - two adjectives (describing subject #1) line 3 - three participles (ending in -ing, telling about the subject #1) line 4 - four nouns (first two related to the subject #1, second two related to subject #2) line 5 - three participles (ending in -ing, telling about subject #2) line 6 - two adjectives (describing subject #2) line 7 - one noun (subject #2- the antonym of line 1) Here's an example written by Mary Elizabeth:
Music Tender, Evocative Consoling, Beautifying, Enchanting Counterpoint, Orchestration, Wail, Cry Scraping, Scrunching, Screeching Harsh, Grating Noise ·······  ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
  
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Aug 30 03, 08:46
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Here's my first attempt: :farmer:
Pulsing Electricity
Pulse Perpetual, Rhythmic Throbbing, Expanding, Contracting Sonar, Generator, Circuit, Amp Charging, Transmitting, Shocking Static, Conductive Electricity ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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Oct 27 03, 07:25
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 18,578 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Serious Fun
sobriety formal, rigid defining, restricting, focusing gravity, seriousness; laughter, frivolity diverting, amusing, entertaining dizzy, giddy fun © Daniel J Ricketts 23 Jan 2003 ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Oct 28 03, 18:05
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SURVIVAL OF THE FITTEST human sensible, sane giving, understanding, loving hardwork, sobriety, evasiveness, deception taking, spinning, taxing, opinionated, selfish politician Alan McAlpine Douglas |
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Oct 28 03, 18:10
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
QUOTE (Just Daniel @ Oct. 27 2003, 07:25) Serious Fun sobriety formal, rigid defining, restricting, focusing gravity, seriousness; laughter, frivolity diverting, amusing, entertaining dizzy, giddy fun © Daniel J Ricketts 23 Jan 2003 Excellent Daniel! I find these very hard!!!  Cleo :pharoah2 ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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Oct 28 03, 18:11
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
QUOTE (Alan @ Oct. 28 2003, 18:05) Human Sensible, sane Giving, understanding, loving Hardwork, sobriety, evasiveness, deception Taking, spinning, taxing, Opinionated, selfish Politician Alan McAlpine Douglas Wow! What valid points ehre "A"! :read: Excellent! :pharoah2 :pharoah: :lovie: ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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Oct 29 03, 07:53
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,578 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Presently I don't have the inspiration to write a new one, but I think you'll find this interesting, Alan. I like yours. Would you consider removing the CAPITALS. Politicians end up there, I know, but...
 Come on, LorII, what can't you do?!deLightedly, Daniel  Free Meter Re Verse
Free footloose, unbound gliding, dreaming, wandering story, ballad; rhyme, sonnet guiding, moving, driving steady, patterned Meter © Daniel J Ricketts 10 July 2002 ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Oct 29 03, 17:07
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Dear Daniel
Thanks for the info you liked my diamante. Strangely enough perhaps, I don't. In a sense it was just a few words thrown togetehr, to get the feel of the form, but there was not much "inspiration" there. I was wondering about the Caps - I've removed ALL of them. Is that better, or should I do what you did and jusr CAP the two opposed words ? Whereas I think yours has an elegance which I don't see in mine. Love Alan |
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Oct 29 03, 21:26
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,578 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Good questions, Alan, I think! Remember that I have no claim to expertise in this form whatever. I've written maybe 15 of them. That surely isn't a bunch! But if this is your first one, as you said, you're getting the FEEL of the form. It will grow on you as you keep playing with it.
You've started well, as far as I'm concerned... and I like it better without the capitals. Capitalizing the first and last word? Well, you the writer are the last word on that! *smile*  Remember, you chose two words that aren't exactly opposite each other, so it is harder to see a transition, methinks. Even though the stereotype politician may net be 'human'; politician is not exactly an antonym! So for your next attempt, choose direct opposites and play a little. It will grow on you. Here's a variation on a diamante I wrote recently. Istead of two sets of opposing words in the middle line separated by a semi-colon as I usually have done, I chose to place TWO words in the middle where the 'opposite' words (in my conception, at least) meet. In all other ways it's a diamante. Tell me what you think? Poetry: where thought and emotion meet Thought cerebral, effective cogitating, reckoning, considering conception; Poetic Expression; daydream sensing, experiencing, feeling affective, diffuse Emotion © Daniel J Ricketts 20 Sept 2003 variation on a diamante Sharin' de Light, Daniel
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Oct 30 03, 03:29
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Dear Daniel
Before I handle the content, I want to tell you of a very weird sensation I have just experienced : Reading what you wrote in "straight" language was very hard to do, as I am so used to your extraordinary ability to have every singlet vest turn into a doublet intendre ! Now, if'n you ain't no expat, then you'll still do fer me. What you say about gaining experience, and about choosing true opposites, rings true. As you will know I tend towards the satirical, so would dispute that humas and polits are not opposite ! But I do take your point. And your acceptance of my first diamante is very pleasing. The example you give is, of course, brilliante ! In fact I PREFER this form, the two middle words acting as a pivot for the whole exercise, and think I will adopt this in any future ones I attempt. They in fact justify the shape, make it whole. Otherwise one could simply write 2 lines : human sensible, sane, giving, understanding, loving hardwork, sobriety, evasiveness, deception taking, spinning, taxing, opinionated, selfish politician Having the first/last words as the hook to hang on is dispersing, putting the pivot in the middle turns this into a real art form, and I def approve ! One could NOT do that to your Thought/Emotion poem, so well done on defining/improving the form. We'll need to have the right name for this variation : Diamante Delightly ? Diamante Juste ? (This one also makes SENSE !) Love Alan |
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Oct 30 03, 06:43
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,578 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Thank you for your thoughtful observations, Alan. I've certainly never been one to shy from variations to a form... sometimes before I've really learned them. I do like to play... serioiusly!
Let's continue this discussion. I think it may even turn out to be educational for both of us? Evolution of a Friendship Distant aloof, remote removed, abstracted, reserved acquaintance, associate; friend, companion confiding, unrestrained, beloved intimate, dear Close © Daniel J Ricketts 01 Jan 2003 deLightedly, Daniel P.S. Note I've broken the 'rule' of using present participles or gerunds in lines 3 and 5 by using past participles as well. ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Oct 31 03, 02:23
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Dear Daniel
OK, I'll play. Still tend to think that these poems are straight out of a thesaurus ! (Used only once, to no avail, for this one) Chalk and Cheese Friends : respectful, cautious talking, cheek-pecking, goodbye-ing, mildness, chalk/cheese, maturity hello-ing, all-embracing, committing involved, passionate, Lovers ! Love Alan |
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Oct 31 03, 08:14
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,578 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Chalk it up to experience, Alan! That one doesn't seem cheesy to me... but then who am I to cut it?
leaving Lightning-fast, Daniel Multitude
helpless, shepherdless wandering, teeming, searching fruitlands, sheep; reapers, shepherds harvesting, discipling, tending grounded, compassionate few © Daniel J Ricketts 25 August 2002 ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Oct 31 03, 08:33
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Dear Daniel
Another nice one ! It occurs to me that my middle pair of chalk/cheese could sit in any one of the diamantes we've written, so was not as clever as I first thought. Let me rephrase my comment : MY diamantes are thesaurus-laden, yours are not ! Love Alan |
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Jun 7 05, 06:30
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,578 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Euphonic Cacophony
a forged diamante You Phoney! fraudulent, synthetic simulating, imitating, impersonating, wannabe, counterfeit; deception, misrepresentation dissembling, feigning, falsifying twisted, lopsided Cockeyed phony! © Daniel J Ricketts ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Jun 7 05, 06:33
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,578 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
bottoms up
bottoms shot, depressed whimpering, sniveling, drinking taproom barstool; twelfth-step coffee-shop listening, reflecting, sharing rested, refreshed up © Daniel J Ricketts ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Jun 7 05, 07:17
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 2,587 Joined: 9-August 03 From: Australia Member No.: 17 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry |
Daniel,
Your last poem's hillarious :claps:I'll have to come back 'n see what I can doo. :troy: :troy: :troy: :troy: :troy: :pilgrim: :pilgrim: :pilgrim: :pilgrim: :pilgrim: :pilgrim: ······· ·······Arnfinn
Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here! MM Award Winner   |
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Jun 4 05, 07:53
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 2,587 Joined: 9-August 03 From: Australia Member No.: 17 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry |
Diamonte.
The Diamonte poem is a grammatical exercise. Line 1-one noun (subject) Line 2-two adjectives (describing subject #1) Line 3-three participles (ending in-ing, telling about the subject #1) Line 4-four nouns(first two related to subject #1 second two related to subject #2) Line 5-three participales ending in-ing, telling about subject #2) Line6-two adjectives(describing subject #2) Line7-one noun(subject #2) This is my Diamonte. Duck/Hen Duck white, yellow-billed, quacking, paddling, wagging, fat, friend, feather, busybody, pecking, scratching, laying, broody, clucky, Hen. Arnie  ······· ·······Arnfinn
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Jun 4 05, 08:37
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 3,660 Joined: 23-August 03 From: Somerset, England Member No.: 22 Real Name: Grace Writer of: Poetry & Prose |
Yeah Arniiiiiiiiie,
This looks like great fun, and you wrote about one of my very favourite boids. (The duck that is)  Copying the rules and am shooting thru to play now. See ya cobber.   ······· ······· Love
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Jun 4 05, 08:43
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Arnie the Finn!
 Some refer to this form as the Diamante. I have a thread here in Karnak here: http://forums.mosaicmusings.net/cgi-bin....9;t=278 Should we merge them together and call it by both names?  ~Cleo ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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