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| Guest_Zeus˛_* |
  Nov 13 03, 13:27
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Sounds in the Dark
In the starlight of heaven and darkness when I sit alone, waiting for you, faint whispers that I hear pour softly down, voice so distant. Your words, hold me powerless restrained, tense, there among the rocks, through the leaves and branches the bleeding drops, like lyrics of love. Must I swim the delicate path of hope, tread the gossamer thread of life, wonder if her shrouded hope will fail, that nature’s pulses reaped. Yet in the dalliance of my life strong is the spirit that trails. |
  
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Nov 13 03, 19:35
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Ornate Oracle  Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr |
You have woven a coherent story. You seem to have the knack for bringing sense to disassociated phrases.
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| Guest_Zeus˛_* |
Nov 13 03, 21:58
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John,
Wish I was coherent all the time. The phrases just give me a boost in the right direction. Glad you enjoyed. Larry 
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Nov 14 03, 18:58
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Nicely written Larry.
Simple and direct. Just as he would have liked it. Oh Captain My Captain. The Prize is almost won. Tom . |
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Nov 14 03, 19:55
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 1,547 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Jeddah, Saudi Arabia Member No.: 13 Real Name: Daniah Writer of: Poetry |
Larry,
You know my reaction to this when you first shared it with me... This is one of my fav of yours yet... and I know you'll give me more to love soon... Lovely read indeed! Dani ······· ·······Happiness is a journey, not a destination.
"A good book is not read and forgotten. It lingers in the mind of the reader, reshaping thoughts, asking new questions, revisiting ancient ones." MM Award Winner  |
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| Guest_Zeus˛_* |
Nov 15 03, 04:37
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Tom,
Walt was a nice guy, hope I pleased him. "The port is near the prize, not so near" Glad you liked it. Larry the z 
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| Guest_Zeus˛_* |
Nov 15 03, 04:41
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Dani,
Thanks so much for your kind words, hope I can live up to your expectations.Thanks for stopping in. Hugs Larry 
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Nov 15 03, 06:29
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 3,822 Joined: 3-August 03 From: Florida Member No.: 10 Real Name: Elizabeth Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori Kanter |
Oh Zeus, How beauitful... this is one of your ultimate perfect poems and you have a list longer than us all together of amazing poems!
Hugs, Liz I look forward to reading more like this from you! ······· ·······Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here!
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| Guest_Zeus˛_* |
Nov 15 03, 18:38
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Liz,
Thanks dear, for your faith in Zeus. I wish my poems were perfect, but even as a god, I have no control. Just a mortal would be poet. Glad you enjoyed and your comments. HUGS Z man 
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