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RC James
post Jan 17 17, 01:30
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I

Abelard’s classrooms hummed with insight,
he introduced logic seductively,
and illumined charges of revision.
Walking the sodden streets, virgin thoughts
bounded beside him. Devoted
to the altar of God and son, renewed,
he undid the racky syllabus grown musty.

Niece of the canon of Noltre Dame,
Heloise suppressed her thoughts,
whispered to her classmates,
wanting changes.
She released will o`the wisp
from papers of antiquated hubris
and looked for a guide, a teacher,
who espoused possibility in all,
any willing man, woman immortal , entire.
Only a solitary saint testing women's waters
witnessed her abrupt conversion in his lecture,
when, at the podium, she saw the half of herself
she thought she'd never find, fast in his eyes.
Clarity spoke to both; beyond breath,
they forsook all to sigh's effusion,
love streamed agua pura freshets
lucid as words that hold their own rain.

II

Uncle Fulbert was blind to their kisses
at the villa, he made Abelard her tutor.
He played irascible pedant, interlopers
shied away.Their lessons blossomed in private,
filled with Latin, Greek and two hearts abrim.
Last to know, Fulbert saw them flagrante delecto,
gave Abelard the axe and Heloise a tighter rein.

Heloise told Abelard of her pregnancy,
marriage would resolve it,
he gladly reassured her.
No, she’d rather stay a free woman,
his career could then fly.
“Sweet chains,” put Heloise off,
he’d go to sleep. “Prison of love”
flashed in her mind.
Fulbert’s threat was grave;
to a convent, take the habit, not the veil,
she’d leave at will.
In nun’s disguise she journied,
Abelard's sister, good haven and peace.
Fulbert was stunned; Abelard pleaded
the force of love, infuriating him more.

A Chamberlain gave up the keys
to Fulbert’s hired assassins,
who, with dispatch, castrated Abelard.
Neighbors heard screams, scholars flocked,
howling misfortune.
Women there, with profound tenderness,
nursed and calmed him.
Both felt shame and deep sorrow.
Abelard turned to the monastery.
he taught again, loose of any temptations.
Heloise became first abbess
of the Paraclete Abbey; child,
sister, mother, in the world
for the rest of her days. She could not
end all contact with him, as letters show.
Theological snipers attacked Abelard,
he parried with infallible defense.
Years later, in a brief
and startling reunión
at a ceremony in Paris,
they both realized
that their love was the true
and holy key to life.
In his last years he was shown great kindness,
no jealousy for his learning. 1142 he was gone.

Heloise studied for twenty years more.

History:
Heloise was a gifted student in 12th Century Paris, neice of Notre Dame’s Canon Fulbert. Twenty years her senior, Abelard, a philosopher/teacher, was intrigued by her wit and intelligence, on an intelectual par with him. They became romantically entwined, though such a relationship was forbidden at the time. Heloise became pregnant, and they fled Paris. They were plagued and harrassed by the uncle’s interference in their lives. Heloise escaped to a convent in Argenteuil. Fulbert set his hired assassins on Abelard. Their love endures in countless letters.





Part II



Passion and near hourly embraces followed,
hidden from her Uncle Fulbert’s view.
Not thinking past scholarship and reputation,
he’d appointed Abelard, Heloise’s tutor.
Abelard played a stern pedant to ward off interlopers,
and give them time and privacy for their abandon.
When Fulbert, the last to know of the affair,
encountered them flagrante delecti,
he mandated they must part.

Latet curiosa bene floret caritas

Pregnant, Heloise announced it to Abelard;
he tried to reassure her, proposed marriage,
but she vehemently rejected the idea,
feeling her need to remain a free woman,
and not disrupt his career. He disguised her
as a nun, and set her on the road to his sister’s.
Her departure stunned Fulbert, Abelard
infuriated him more by pleading the force of love,
then agreed to Fulbert’s demand for marriage.

Duo continent, et quod conjugia amoris

Heloise argued against strictures of “sweet chains,”
and the monotony he’d feel seeing her every day,
that marriage would be a prison of love.
Abelard prevailed with the threat Fulbert held.
both agreed she should enter a convent, take the habit,
but not the veil, so she could easily come out again.
Fulbert, in a storm of rage and need for revenge,
bribed a domestic to open Abelard’s chamber for thugs,
who emasculated Abelard, his agonized screaming
alerting the neighbors. Scholars howled misfortune,
women around him exhibited extreme tenderness.

Flet modo vocat error ordinatus ad sui

The two, she no less, shared a sense of shame and sorrow;
shame, not conviction, turned Abelard to the monastery.
Now, Abelard began to teach again, loose of any temptations.
Through Bishop Troies, he appointed Heloise first abbess
of the Paraclete Abbey; she became child, sister, mother,
in the world for the rest of her days, and could not,
as Abelard thought best, end all contact with him, as letters show.
Liturgical attacks followed Abelard, his defenses were successful.
In his last retirement, he encountered great kindness, no jealousy
for his learning. He died on april 21st, 1142;
Heloise lived 20 years longer; she continued to study.

Residet interius dum citu


1. Hidden from the curious love fully blossoms
2. Two marriages embody one love
3. Rage wrongly directed harms only the self
4. Wisdom resides inside ready to be summoned
 
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Eisa
post Mar 5 17, 07:48
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Hi Richard,

I've just noticed that you have no comments on this great poem. Your poems are always interesting and well written, Just a few thoughts below.


Passion and near hourly embraces followed,
hidden from her Uncle Fulbert’s view.
Not thinking past scholarship and reputation,
he’d appointed Abelard, Heloise’s tutor.
Abelard played a stern pedant to ward off interlopers,
and give them time and privacy for their abandon.
When Fulbert, the last to know of the affair,
encountered them flagrante delecti,
he mandated they must part.

L1 - perhaps, Passion with near hourly embraces followed,

Latet curiosa bene floret caritas

Pregnant, Heloise announced it to Abelard;
he tried to reassure her, proposed marriage,
but she vehemently rejected the idea,
feeling her need to remain a free woman,
and not disrupt his career. He disguised her
as a nun, and set her on the road to his sister’s.
Her departure stunned Fulbert, Abelard
infuriated him more by pleading the force of love,
then agreed to Fulbert’s demand for marriage.

Duo continent, et quod conjugia amoris

Heloise argued against strictures of “sweet chains,”
and the monotony he’d feel seeing her every day,
that marriage would be a prison of love.
Abelard prevailed with the threat Fulbert held.
both agreed she should enter a convent, take the habit,
but not the veil, so she could easily come out again.
Fulbert, in a storm of rage and need for revenge,
bribed a domestic to open Abelard’s chamber for thugs,
who emasculated Abelard, his agonized screaming
alerting the neighbors. Scholars howled misfortune,
women around him exhibited extreme tenderness.

Love 'sweet chains' in L1

Flet modo vocat error ordinatus ad sui

The two, she no less, shared a sense of shame and sorrow;
shame, not conviction, turned Abelard to the monastery.
Now, Abelard began to teach again, loose of any temptations.
Through Bishop Troies, he appointed Heloise first abbess
of the Paraclete Abbey; she became child, sister, mother,
in the world for the rest of her days, and could not,
as Abelard thought best, end all contact with him, as letters show.
Liturgical attacks followed Abelard, his defenses were successful.
In his last retirement, he encountered great kindness, no jealousy
for his learning. He died on april 21st, 1142;
Heloise lived 20 years longer; she continued to study.

I wonder if 'she no less' is needed in L1 - that line feels a bit cluttered

Residet interius dum citu


This is such an interesting prose poem, Richard. I'll have to return for a second read to absorb it all.

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RC James
post Mar 23 17, 15:24
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Eisa - I've changed it to this:

I

Abelard’s classrooms hummed with insight,
he introduced logic seductively,
and illumined charges of revision.
Walking the sodden streets, virgin thoughts
bounded beside him. Devoted
to the altar of God and son, renewed,
he undid the racky syllabus grown musty.

Niece of the canon of Noltre Dame,
Heloise suppressed her thoughts,
whispered to her classmates,
wanting changes.
She released will o`the wisp
from papers of antiquated hubris
and looked for a guide, a teacher,
who espoused possibility in all,
any willing man, woman immortal , entire.
Only a solitary saint testing women's waters
witnessed her abrupt conversion in his lecture,
when, at the podium, she saw the half of herself
she thought she'd never find, fast in his eyes.
Clarity spoke to both; beyond breath,
they forsook all to sigh's effusion,
love streamed agua pura freshets
lucid as words that hold their own rain.

II

Uncle Fulbert was blind to their kisses
at the villa, he made Abelard her tutor.
He played irascible pedant, interlopers
shied away.Their lessons blossomed in private,
filled with Latin, Greek and two hearts abrim.
Last to know, Fulbert saw them flagrante delecto,
gave Abelard the axe and Heloise a tighter rein.

Heloise told Abelard of her pregnancy,
marriage would resolve it,
he gladly reassured her.
No, she’d rather stay a free woman,
his career could then fly.
“Sweet chains,” put Heloise off,
he’d go to sleep. “Prison of love”
flashed in her mind.
Fulbert’s threat was grave;
to a convent, take the habit, not the veil,
she’d leave at will.
In nun’s disguise she journied,
Abelard's sister, good haven and peace.
Fulbert was stunned; Abelard pleaded
the force of love, infuriating him more.

A Chamberlain gave up the keys
to Fulbert’s hired assassins,
who, with dispatch, castrated Abelard.
Neighbors heard screams, scholars flocked,
howling misfortune.
Women there, with profound tenderness,
nursed and calmed him.
Both felt shame and deep sorrow.
Abelard turned to the monastery.
he taught again, loose of any temptations.
Heloise became first abbess
of the Paraclete Abbey; child,
sister, mother, in the world
for the rest of her days. She could not
end all contact with him, as letters show.
Theological snipers attacked Abelard,
he parried with infallible defense.
Years later, in a brief
and startling reunión
at a ceremony in Paris,
they both realized
that their love was the true
and holy key to life.
In his last years he was shown great kindness,
no jealousy for his learning. 1142 he was gone.

Heloise studied for twenty years more.

History:
Heloise was a gifted student in 12th Century Paris, neice of Notre Dame’s Canon Fulbert. Twenty years her senior, Abelard, a philosopher/teacher, was intrigued by her wit and intelligence, on an intelectual par with him. They became romantically entwined, though such a relationship was forbidden at the time. Heloise became pregnant, and they fled Paris. They were plagued and harrassed by the uncle’s interference in their lives. Heloise escaped to a convent in Argenteuil. Fulbert set his hired assassins on Abelard. Their love endures in countless letters.
 
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